Knight_Noctis - Profile

no need for harem .Story has good pace, and having a harem would destroy that

I'm getting confused and honestly a little bit disappointed with your mc. The story is quite good, but the way your mc acted feels like a third-rate villain . I'm not saying him to be a hero but for an earthling who's just transmigratted into this body to be this unhinged , honestly little bit off-putting

Chinese references are frustrating. If your mc is an American, I suggest that you remove these or exchange them with other US references .

Honestly, this feels a little bit forced fight to awaken his fruit . Was it really necessary to go to pangea castle.He knew the danger but recklessly attacled.For all the story, mc was never reckless.That was his character archtype, and im fine with it .But all of a sudden, he went to pick a fight,with the five elders i understand, but he didn'tneed to pick a fight with Im if she didn't come out to fight.. What's the guarantee, IM wouldn't just kill him, and there comes the question of IM strength . How strong is he/she in the story. As in one piece,she supposedly fought with joyboy and she seems to have won.

ice breathing/snow breathing, if his blood art has something to do with destruction, then annihilation breathing , sun breathing is already there. Honestly I think there's a wiki page dedicated to fan created breathing styles you can check out there.

I'm not sure, honestly. Your mc has been pretty much given everything without training. He's going for an op route . he's made some solid wishes ,ngl. But he seems to get everything easily, which lowers the value of the story for me . You can't just scream and get the ability instantly. In my opinion, the story would be much better if he struggled for this power . But at the end of the day, this is your story, and if you wanted to make a wish-fulfillment or op mc or whatever, go for it.

this Chinese references are really annoying. Also what is he'll is tge healing skill ? Is it something magical ?

I get that you were trying to make your character much more teenager type who will experience life buy the way he behaves around his family , friends doesn't seem really teenage type though , does it? He seems so mature yet so clueless . This contradicting nature of his troubled me a little bit .To me,He seemed so listless in the first 10-20 chapters. Tbh, that might also be because of chapter updating schedules . Nowadays, this story seems much more amazing as with the much more regular updates, we can see mc dreams, passion, and working toward that passion. This story seems to be heading somewhere

I'm honestly not sure if author has much knowledge about hp . It feels like most of info he's gotten from fanfics. Especially with his critics about study materials or topics of hogwarts which can be easily answered if you think about it .In this chapter, mc is actually trusting a goblin. I'm pretty sure goblins ate the most untrustworthy in the whole hp stories. Well let's see what it will offer

asterion*

hey author, sorry for my ignorance. But I don't get it exactly how would clock tower help asterisk establish his rule over the country . With allowing muggle, it only seems that dumbledore is the only one that's winning this batte.

I don't know who this shizuka is . From which is she from

what a stupid fight. Guys using self-defense techniques to attack against a horde of monsters. Let's forget that . The guy apparently has ultra instincts. He's dodging attacks miraculously .And with what ? a fking decorative sword. It's probably my fault for expecting good atory