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XYZ_XYZ_2587
4 days ago
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Next Time:- Hawkeye:- Red Hair, your daughter Uta has a boyfriend and he said and I quote "And let him know that I'll bring his grandchildren to vit him someday ". Shanks:-

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
11 days ago
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Flamethrower???? Author seems to have mistaken Eruption for Flamethrower. Flamethrower is one of the most common or probably the most common Fire type move. while Eruption is only known to about 4-5 Pokemon.

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
12 days ago
Commented

+1

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
14 days ago
Commented

+1

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
14 days ago
Commented

+1

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
16 days ago
Commented

hey, change the name of Princess Vivi by removing the D. initial. No one knew till the Levely Arc that The Royal Family of Alabasta has D. Initial. If you make it known then, the 5 Elders would definitely use the Ancient Weapon to destroy the Alabasta to end Cobra and Vivi. The World Government hates those with D. initials and had killed many with D. initials over centuries. So change it as it would cause Chaos to the storyline and plot.

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
17 days ago
Commented

atleast add Dorothy as Dorothy is rarely used as a love interest. And a revived Princia Funnybunny can be even more nice since she has never been used as a Love Interest. And her age is also around 22 at the time of Death.

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
17 days ago
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5) Princia Funny bunny ( revived ), Secre, or Charlotte/ Dorothy/ Mimosa/ Vanessa ( any one of the 4 )

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
17 days ago
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1) Noelle, Dorothy, Charlotte 2) Noelle, Mimosa, Vanessa 3) Mimosa, Vanessa, Charlotte 4) Mimosa, Dorothy, Charlotte 5) Charlotte, Dorothy, Vanessa ( Mereoleona is too old to be matched properly. The old lady is in her 30s and the boy is just 15 ).

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XYZ_XYZ_2587
19 days ago
Posted

I would just say. Try to update the names of the characters properly. please. it confuse the readers regarding the names. outside of that, pretty nice Fanfic. don't drop, and try to adjust the names properly

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