Charles_Rubbio

LV 4
2022-06-26 Bergabung Global
Lencana 4

Moments 7
Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
1 years ago
Commented

too many filler & unfunny jokes.

Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
2 years ago
Commented

It's getting better at least you are reducing sim city wanna be, building is good but if you are focusing too much on building or buying furniture for every 1-3 chapters are boring. Hashirama should go against Sengoku bc both of them are using budha as icon and Garp should go against a hand-to-hand combat like Hanma's family (Baki, his brother or father) or others anime. You are improving but still lack of using new words, but overall is getting better.

Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
2 years ago
Replied to Charles_Rubbio

A king too much focus with what the hell furnitures, sands, stone, whatever it is. Mc is a king so please act like a wise king, not fucking low wages mc check on cable, stone, house and many more. Keep it simple with fucking butler or prime minister and let the do their jobs on sim city bullshit and give simple report or update about your kingdom and focus more about a real one piece world.

Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
2 years ago
Commented

There is no story so far, it is just an arrogant mc wanna be but there are really no story behind his arrogant. Stupid novel with stupid author who do not understand about novel and how to create it.

Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
2 years ago
Commented

Bring peace is six path asked for but mc is killing everyone, so what's the point six path trained him for? Made him a fanatic killer? Lol.. Author is just couldnt make a good plot, it messed up since the very start!

Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
2 years ago
Commented

One piece is a world of adventure where body, mind, soul, technology and mythology are in one set you have already added another body, mind, and soul from different manga so you should add more story about technology or mythology (marvel-dc or maybe WOW).

Charles_Rubbio
Charles_Rubbio
2 years ago
Posted

Overall is a good quality novel for resident evil fanfiction but the update is not on time, and I guess it is very slow story telling maybe it will left by the author before it will be finish.