Great Story but when are you going to write more. I hope you didn’t drop it
For the undead palace, I meant to have it where you can have the MC undead have a fight arena with various different facilities. If the MC have extra undead, and the MC doesn’t have plans to use them. He can try Something are the poison jar story: "the poison was prepared by placing many toxic insects in a closed vessel and allowing them to remain there until one had eaten all the rest – the toxin was then extracted from the survivor." This will allow you to create variations of types of undead. Basically you’ll be sacrifice quantity of undead for even stronger undead and probably with a new form with various different abilities. Is basically a place for him to gamble his undead away.
I’m glad someone will be using my ideas in their novel. 😁 But before you do that can you also add an item that a subspace that can stores the dead, it also helps them recover from injuries. You can call it the 🧟♂️ Undead Palace 🧟♀️
Sounds like an interesting offer, I have three concepts that I always wanted to be made into a book. 1. Devil’s Paradise - it’s about the Goddess of Chao being betrayed by her allies and injured by their common enemies. She search for a mortal who has adaptable traits and can help her with her revenge and more. Asura Grimheart born with everything a kid could ever imagine. But watch his entire family get massacre in front of him. He somehow escaped and plotting his revenge. He lived in the slums for a while, build up an organization. He succeeded in his revenge, but still died. But this is when he met the goddess of chaos. They both made a deal with each other and this was how their story truly begin. Asura made a deal with the goddess to create his own system with functions that will help him accomplish their goals. He tried to trick the goddess to get an OP system, but he didn’t know she could read his mind and she decided to Nerf him for a punishment, but also one that sees his reaction and laugh. Just to let you know the system was called Creation & Customization. 2. Hardcore Gamer In a Cultivation World- Andrew MorningStar suffers from an incurable disease since youth. His parents try so hard to find a cure for him traveling around the world and taking him to all types of doctors. But nothing works, his other relatives was angry at this because they felt his parents who are very wealthy were wasting their money on a waste. But Andrew started to see peoples true colors. But Andrew‘s parents care so much for him. They found a VRMMORPG game called New Destiny. Andrew had to play many games mostly for the challenges the harder the better him. This game was different you start as a mob character you create. The challenge of this game was to change the destiny of many random and different character in this world but your role is to change it how you feel. They can be supporting characters for your main character. There’s one free Rolette Wheel that would send you a character or guide you to a character for you. But when this happens, there’ll be an incident where you have to save your character or help them solve problem. But if you don’t do this, you will lose that character forever. This would be your main character, you level up and change their destiny. Andrew found out that there are destiny levels of a character the higher they are the more fortunate they are the lower, the destiny the more fortunate. But his game glitch and gave him a character with more misfortune, and because of this he found out that a player can gain more destiny points and better rewards if they change character destiny with the worst destiny. The disease caught up with him and he died, but he ended up in a cultivation world with the New Destiny system. He decided he was going to enjoy his life to the fullest. By completing all the missions that the destiny game system gave him.(Oh and to let you know, he chose the villain route most of the time because it’s more fun so he had all villainess as main characters) 3. Myriad Trade System- Malachi StarRebel was a reincarnated from earth who reincarnated in a parallel world with cultivation and supernatural/fantasy creatures. His was a high school student who lost his family in a tragic accident. But he never believe his family died in an accident he knew his family had many secrets. That they couldn’t tell him fully, but his family left him a with a run store. But this was when he awaken his system the Myriad Trade System. Systems that gives him many items to sell. He has to complete quest the system gave him. He also has to make contracts with customers and with his future employees, but there are many loopholes in the contracts for Malachi to help acquire more opportunity and to achieve his goals. (this world is set in a modern / cultivation world with some supernatural and fantasy creatures.) 4. Asura Grimheart- he is a scammer who likes to create personas for his alter ego. He doesn’t care if the opponent is weak or strong, has an outstanding background, or is a commoner on the street. He will find a way to use them or kill them just to achieve his goals. The genre I picked for this was action, adventure, transmigration, system, cultivation, R18, Harem-(Incest,loli,MILF, Yandere, Mc Stealing male characters women,etc..) Weak to strong, Kingdom building, conqueror, evolution, antihero, tamer, and face-slapping. 5. Andrew MorningStar- he likes to be the side character and also the master behind the scenes. Lots of times he’ll just show up show off for fun. He also has shifting abilities and cloning abilities. He will always choose the most dangerous and challenging options. He is overprotective with his characters and more importantly, his female characters he took in. The genre I picked for this was action, adventure, reincarnation, system, cultivation, level up, R18, Harem-(Incest,loli,MILF, Yandere, Mc Stealing male characters women,etc..) Strong characters acting weak, Sect/ Kingdom building, villain, tamer, and face-slapping. 6. Malachi StarRebel-he is another schemer type who likes to keep his abilities a secret to his enemy. He only reveals as much as necessary or to save the people he cares about and his on life. The genre I picked for this was action, adventure, reincarnation, system, cultivation, store level up, R18, Harem-(Incest,loli,MILF, Yandere, Mc Stealing male characters women,etc..), Weak to strong, Strong characters acting weak, antihero, tamer, and face-slapping
I’m Sorry about this I just have a lot of questions because i’m also a fan of Necromancer and Wuxia settings. 1. Will the MC’s undead have sentient with the same personality or will they have sentient with different personalities from when they were alive. 2. Will there be different types of undead the MC can create? 3. Can the Mc’s undead be upgraded to a higher form or gain new abilities. 4. Can the MC uses their abilities if they have some. 5. Can the undead turn into weapons, items, or fuse together? 6. Lastly, in the future will their be romance or harem? And if you do add any of these, just make sure they aren’t useless and can help out the MC instead of being the damsel in distress or just there to look beautiful while be the MC‘s greatest weakness.
I have read your Novel Erotic Adventures in the Omniverse: Vampire Lord got to many wives but just need to caught up on read more chapters and I enjoyed reading it and love the concept of your novel. But I haven’t read My NTR Harem yet.
I enjoyed reading this story and I also like the concept of this story it starts off slow but gets really better there are good action scenes and interesting storytelling. I’m just wondering, are you on hiatus or just done writing this Story?
Fine by me your story will still be great with or without my suggestion 😂
I have a suggestion for a character and chapter This suggestion is for the Zhen Liu wedding and not his two cousins. Once Zhen Liu and family returned home his in-laws are still arguing about who is going to be the first wife with the patriarch. But what they didn’t know is Zhen Liu’s fiancés and girlfriends had a girls night with Zhen Liu’s mother. Alicia and bellona wanted to talk about adding Jin Fang and Rebecca as Zhen Liu’s fiancés and all four have it on the same day. They discuss how they wanted the first half of the wedding to be a fight against all four girls since all the girls have been training in secret. The reason is because they know after the wedding Zhen Liu is going to travel and the girls didn’t want to be left behind like their a burden. The girls wanted to show their strength to everyone and especially for Zhen Liu. This fight will also show which girl will be the first wife and also who will say their wedding vowels first and last. And Alicia will being the best healing pill so the will look beautiful for the wedding and Zhen Liu’s mother help them with everything and talk the in-laws and hide this form Zhen Liu. Second can you have Zhen Liu’s suggest to him to be some type of merchant selling his inventions but acting like it’s someone else’s since the library of nowhere has a lot knowledge plus the knowledge of earth since we’ve seen you use the knowledge, but he’s not making any profit. Like the boat and the hot tube the kaijin made. You can have them build some type of easy to make energy core that can power most of items they make like weapons, armor, and clothings. Or something he just always wanted in some comic or movie like a hoverboard. Because I know you can make both of the scenarios into something hilarious and serious. This suggestion is for a Character she will be a loli feline Bloodliner(lioness jaguar panther types) she is an energetic, short tempered foodie with a body constitution called True Apex and around Zhen Liu age. This body constitution gives her abnormal strength also let her absorb the abilities and body features of the Aether beast or something people she (hunt/kills)but more abilities for killing. This constitution also has another ability but it relies on having a mate and doing a ritual. The person must kiss the person that she deems worthy of being her mate. By doing this she will inject some type anesthetic that will weak her mates body defenses so she can bite him and make a bond between them. This will also allow them to know where each others are, share sense, and share some abilities. It’s basically like having a wedding in her tribe. She was find by Zhen Liu in an underground fighter Arena as a (Slave or Gladiator) but she acted more as a beast than human. But he noticed that this one has more than one desire it was like coming from two people. You can think of this situation as when Bruce Banner gets angry and turn into the hulk but she is having trouble turning off her beast side because of the constant battles she is in try to survive and find her (family/ or a family to call her own). Like I said before I know you can make this an interesting and hilarious scenario if you use it or part of it.
I was enjoying this book you was writing so I’m wondering are you gonna start up again?
I reincarnated into a cultivator world with the Crafter System
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