Ok so I started this novel after it was completed. So I just gave a 5 star rating for that. Anyways, the story seems ok? It’s kinda hard to follow with the sentence structures and grammar. Some, or rather most, of the chapters are not well structured. I’m finding it hard to keep up with what is happening and staying interested. I think this story would have been great if it was written a little better. Sorry for the harsh review. I did try sticking with the story. I made it to chapter 40-something. But I have to call it quits. Hopefully, some writing revisal can be done.
Is his dad a pedophile?!
''Yeah, whatever dad.'' Kaiden knew Zev was endowed with the looks along with the muscles but it sounded odd just now with how his dad referred to him as 'pretty.'
TO LOVE HIM!
LGBT+ · Flaming_ash
So the mom and sister ain’t gonna say anything about Blue having no glasses and a swollen eye? Umm okay then...
Haha fell down some stairs!
Though after they came back Irvin was in a rage and he argued with everyone around. He heard that Irvin fought with his father in the office and the fight might have extended to physically punching each other but he knew that wasn’t true. Though he did see a bruise on Edmond’s face, he chose to ignore it thinking it was because he fell down some stairs or whatever.
The Creature Inside Me
LGBT+ · Laiba
Same
“Yeah.” Zadkiel avoided meeting her gaze and mumbled a ‘sorry’ once again before leaving her to rush to his room.
The Creature Inside Me
LGBT+ · Laiba
How would Abel know if Zad was telling the truth there?
“Jack just said ‘with all due respect miss, I’m not the one hanging off the back of the ship here.” Zadkiel winked at his best friend.
The Creature Inside Me
LGBT+ · Laiba
I’ d say a werewolf.
Irvin got out of his chair, very calmly and walked to the door. The scent was messing up his mind now. He was whimpering inside. He exited through the door and closed his eyes to focus on just one thing. The scent.
The Creature Inside Me
LGBT+ · Laiba
Thats what i was thinking regarding the intial question. Theres no death energy at the academy abd hes on planet Norma now, so he could actually practice necromancy. Yet he goes back to the academy and practices the lightsword?
However, going that route would take many days, so in the meantime, Xiao Lin returned to the academy and began studying the Lightsword. It was one of the skill books he brought back from New Washington. Since he had reached Black Iron-rank and mastered sword aura, it was much easier for him to study it again.
Elite Mages' Academy
Sci-fi · The Final Fool
Soooo the mom doesn’t notice that Noah has bruises and cuts from getting beat up? Yea this story isn’t very well thought out.
She left. I thought about the dream and how I saw or I imagined light in my dream for the first time. I was happy about it but it made no sense at all.
Can't see but feel
LGBT+ · Laiba