Lencana 8
Moments 18
Hey wanted to let you know the sentence starting with “The sensations were overwhelming -“ got a little confusing with so many commas! I think seperating it into 2-3 sentences would make it less confusing. You can use the places where you already have transition words (or other places - up to you) to be the start of your new sentences. What I mean is below: (“.Then, there was the way his cool breath…”) (“ .And finally, …”) In the end however, this is completely up to you :>
Damien did not want to be feeling the things he was currently feeling. He was clutching the dagger Cain had given him so hard that the muscles in his hand were starting to cramp. But even that discomfort wasn't enough to draw his mind away from the dizzying, nigh-overwhelming sensation of the steady press of Cain's tongue against his bare skin. He'd known, at least subconsciously, that contact with his mate was meant to be soothing. And as much as he would have liked to forget, his body still remembered the way it responded the first time he caught the vampire's scent. The sensations were overwhelming - first was the gentle hold the vampire had on his hands as he slowly dragged his tongue over Damien's wrist, then up his forearm, pausing at every cut, every scrape, then there was the way his cool breath fluttered over the wet trails he left on Damien's skin, soothing yet raising goosebumps in its intensity, and finally, there was the moment when Cain hovered over a particularly deep cut, one of the bites Crowe had left on the inner crook of Damien's arm, where the veins hovered nearer to the surface. His lips had closed around the mark completely, and he'd sucked.
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood
:> Good job describing Cain’s inner turmoil! I really enjoyed this chapter👍. The almost sensually slow ‘care’ by Cain while licking Damien’s wrist is unexpectedly hot and the bloodlust is just fuel for the flames 🥵🔥 Keep up the good work! Couldn’t find anything better so here is Cain licking Damien’s wrist (banana Xd)
ch 52 Savor
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood
Ah yes that is true 😅, Damien does still technically have the choice to decline Cain’s offer. However, Damien has sustained a lot of injuries, and it was stated that it would be unwise for him to end up shifting on the full moon in his current conditions. Cain’s method would also be (if it works) the fastest way for him to heal. So, if Cain licking the wounds like a dog is the most reasonable option (which sounds crazy in and of itself) right now, then the shirt must go! 🤷🏼♂️
ch 51 Taste
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood
lol - I’ve had a fair share of romance novels so I can roughly figure things out 😃 I will say though I’m still new to vampire romance so it’s quite interesting! I haven’t read anything about a similar situation (vampire can only feed on a specific person). Cain’s resignation to their fate was sad but in a reasonable way. It felt very human - haha 😂- I also love how while they would be considered morally grey, a lot of it is not by choice, and the choice Cain does make are usually the good or “less evil” options. I hear you on the scheduling. I don’t know how they do it. As someone with a little experience writing ( I’ve almost full stopped now though I want to get back into it) I fully understand how difficult it can be so props to you! 🫡 🫡 Take as long as you need to fully plan ur chapters! Your doing great!
ch 50 Revelation
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood
Cliffhanger :sob: - Anyways great work Author! I had a feeling Cain would only desire Damien’s blood so I’m glad that was true. It sucks that they’re both in pretty poor states right now. Reeeaally curious if Cain will lose control next chapter.
ch 50 Revelation
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood
I’m sorry guys, I didn’t know I would be a wuss in this universe (my names Maverick)
ch 49 First school fight
The Assassin's Enemy Lover
LGBT+ · Andru_9788
Author-Sama, keep up the good work [img=recommend] but I have a question. So this flashback…. Does it have the *spice* in it or is it after the flashback that things start getting *spicy*? I’m mainly just curious about the direction of this book. I’m coming from reading the overbearing CEO twice, which I loved, and your work stands out to me so I was interested in the direction of this. Also could you maybe explain to me how you write your prospective because I always find you writing in this cool way that I admire as a novice writer :> Thanks Author <3
ch 43 Roasting Zi Han's ugly picture
The Assassin's Enemy Lover
LGBT+ · Andru_9788
Sorry for Replying late, but yes that is basically the easiest way to make ut work without having to change anything to extreme
Coming back to the present, he was in the cave which he calls his house. He was hungry he wasted to eat something, prepared himself to go for a hunt.
The Hunter That Returned From Hell
Urban · Rish_madara
If u Put a comma before the he and then changed wasted to wanted it would work
Coming back to the present, he was in the cave which he calls his house. He was hungry he wasted to eat something, prepared himself to go for a hunt.
The Hunter That Returned From Hell
Urban · Rish_madara
Maybe he got small hands??? Or maybe there just that big.
His hands began to roam on her body parts. He was caressing her soft legs underneath her skirt, then his hands traced upward as he touched her full breasts that didn't fit in his palm.
The CEO Who Hates Me
Urban · Eustoma_Reyna
Very 🥵! This chapter was really interesting :> Cain seems to have a lot of… thoughts🫣… Sucks that you didn’t keep your writing streak, but don’t beat yourself up too much over it! ❤️ Hehehe
ch 54 Favor
A Bond of Fate and Blood (BL)
LGBT+ · VHBlood