Hi author! The storyline is great and interesting, however, I want to suggest something. Chop off those bulky paragraphs and use proper punctuation. That's it! It's great after all and might get better throughout the whole story! Good work!👌
Hands down to this story. The author's writing really drew me in and I can feel what the mc is going through. It almost made me cry (not to be dramatic but that's how vulnerable i am with these topics) Definitely need new updates! 🥺
ooof.. that's mean :(
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Fantasy · TimVic
I need more chaps! The story isn't my cup of tea but after reading its few chapters, it changed my mind. I like the author's writing style, keep it up! This story is highly recommended 😉
interesting
I enter the school corridor, tugging unto my sweater as I pass the sea of Balenciaga's and Prada's. They have their designer outfits on and are grouped into cliques, no doubt talking about which country they visited over the weekend or which store they splurged thousands of dollars in. I bet they've never worked a day in their life yet they lavishly spend money like it is nothing but paper.
Teen · Queen_Of_Royals
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"Why did she shout?" Chris asked. Allyson chuckled. "She shouted all her problems at the lighthouse. Man, My ears are still ringing from all those noise." She clarified.
Urban · Royal_mint
Okay! This is only the beginning and it makes me want mooooreeee!!! So good!
See this! I just gifted the story: Lollipop
haha the bird is cute and adorable at the same time funny XD
"Search yourself you lowly servant!!This is not a big trouble for you to find the foods right.Go on and bring some for me as well or else.....I think you understand and now go away shoo,shooo!!!",shouted the bird with its small beak which looks adorable for me but I took his warning seriously.
Fantasy · Zane_Earth
The story is fine, I suggest writing the chapters neatly: fix the grammar and punctuation, the number of words per chapter should be precise and the conversations; make it straight to the point and useful. I hope my review helps and motivates you to write at your best! Good luck, Jagriti! You can do this! I'll continue reading your masterpiece 😊
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Fantasy · Jagriti_Mandal