LukeB

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I write for fun.

2020-07-02 Bergabung Global
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LukeB
LukeB
1 months ago
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Honestly, great story so far. Really like how Greek mythology is implemented in a fantasy transmigration story. I binged all available chapters in a single morning

LukeB
LukeB
8 months ago
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Take some time off if you need. Family comes first.

LukeB
LukeB
1 years ago
Replied to William_Tex

This already deviated from the other version so there isn’t much to spoiler

LukeB
LukeB
LukeB
1 years ago
Commented

I’m kind of waiting for a sick MC moment. Hope he gets some kind of power-up with a touch of insanity 🫡

LukeB
LukeB
1 years ago
Commented

Thanks for the chapter and congratulations on the contract

LukeB
LukeB
LukeB
1 years ago
Commented

I think the details you put in right now are perfectly fine. It makes the story feel more alive. If there is one thing, then I would suggest to shorten the description of fights against monsters or opponents that do not have a big impact or return in the story. If it’s a recurring antagonist of importance then it’s okay but for simple Gate hunting chapters it draws them out too long. Instead, you could redirect that space to elaborate on other characters, thoughts of the MC, descriptions of surroundings and what is happening around it. This makes the chapters much more engaging and interesting. For example, focus on the human experiments in this dungeon and maybe add some failed experiments he has to mercy kill to put them out of their misery. Maybe he can save some of them. You can also include like things he does afterward to try to deal with the psychological stress like visiting the few saved human experiments in the hospital. This can add to his future character development. Otherwise, it’s great. The MC seems rather normal and humane in this story compared to other novels of this kind where the author tries to make them unnecessarily special or unique but ends up making it annoying and cringe. Great job. Keep up the good work 👍

LukeB
LukeB
1 years ago
Commented

It’s great. Keep it up. The quality has vastly improved compared to before. Although I didn’t mind it, this really puts a smile to my face. Great job and keep it up. This is one of the few stories on webnovel i genuinely keep up with. Thanks author 👍

LukeB
LukeB
1 years ago
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I Like how this is going. Very similar to the first version but the details, better grammar, and slightly different plot elements make this story more complete and way better. Great chapter 👍