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Valtura
male LV 14Full time worker and novice writer.
2020-02-26 Bergabung GlobalLencana 13
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People said this before, but if no one points it out then I won’t catch it. I don’t make enough on here for an editor
ch 0 5 Chapter 5: More than he can handle?
Becoming a Monster
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Thank you! And yes this is my first. I wasn’t confident in myself at all in the beginning and I constantly felt that I needed to rush some parts so I wouldn’t disinterest people too soon. But everyone’s comments helps a lot and I constantly aim to improve.
A/N: I just want to give everyone a heads up that their won't be any chapters for the weekend. This, work and life is just living me a little burnt out so I'll be using this weekend to relax.
Becoming a Monster
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Sadly he can’t. Blood pact has to have the person/creature to be bonded with him or it wouldn’t work. but I have something planned for her. It’ll be kinda dark, but I’m slowly building up to it so you might can already tell what will happen.
A/N: Some or you may not like the route Noah took, but this is the best way for Ailetta to progress faster that doesn't seem forced.
Becoming a Monster
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Thanks for the review! Having the story flop has been one of my biggest worries. But I care a lot about this story and If it’s something I don’t enjoy then I wouldn’t continue writing it. So hopefully that helps me continue to write a story that you’ll continue to enjoy.
If he didn’t already accept that he was dead before then he would’ve been mad. But I think having near life death experiences can really change you
"He was helping me all this time." They both said in tandem before looking at each other in disbelief.
Becoming a Monster
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I agree. She’s just becoming too impatient and that will only lead to recklessness
"Noah, please tame me!"
Becoming a Monster
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This is good to know. I try to please both sides, people who like seeing the stats and people who don’t, so I’m trying to find a balance. But until I hear a different opinion, I’ll slowly start going back to how I did it before. Thanks for the input!
ch 101 Chapter 101: You’re Dispensable
Becoming a Monster
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Thank you! It’s been a rough week so far because the training is very lacking. Hopefully next week goes a lot more smoothly.
ch 103 Chapter 103: Fighting for Attention
Becoming a Monster
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I don’t stop till way later on after someone had told me that they also didnt like. It was more used for me as a starting point to help me continue on to the next chapter. Didn’t think it would bother anyone
ch 31 Chapter 31: Telling on Yourself
Becoming a Monster
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He doesn’t think he’s above them, he just doesn’t believe he’s the same as them. I think I even mentioned that he even respected Mark bc of marks determination to grow stronger. But I agree with you, his personality is weak. His mindset is changing, but he can’t throw away who he is in a day. All he can do is to not let peopel push him too far which I’ve been making sure hasn’t happened yet. In the end he always puts his foot down. At least that’s what I’ve been trying to get across.
ch 99 Chapter 99: Pathetic
Becoming a Monster
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I’m glad you think so! Writing this story is more important than the money involved. It’s my first story original story so I want it to be good.
But those are the only things I've found wrong so far. If you find anything or something feels questionable, post it in the comments. Thanks for reading!
Becoming a Monster
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It’s a stereotype for good reason. Almost anything you read or watch has a stereotype or two
There was Dom who Noah considered a pig, he had a heavier build than most in the school and was proud of it but was also a huge suck up. Then there was Jarred, he would be what Noah would consider the lackey of the three. He was of smaller height and would usually run the errands of the other two students and somehow always knew the gossip going around the school. And lastly, was Logan, who had the young master vibe going for him but when it came to the actual higher class students he became meek.
Becoming a Monster
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I understand, if she could hold her own then she would make a more enjoyable character to read about. What I’ve been wanting people to understand about her is that no matter what Noah did or what he’s become, her feelings for him never changed. and that effects Noah a lot since he’s never had that before. But it doesn’t mean he loves her. I’ve hinted a couple of times, but he does have doubts about her. The fact that you find her annoying means I’ve atleast done a good job giving her character😅. It’s all to lead up for her change though and her reason for her change so hopefully it’s worth it.
ch 98 Chapter 98: What have you been doing?
Becoming a Monster
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Not many will see this, but I will not post any chapters for the time being. Being spammed with negative reviews by fresh accounts that hasn’t even read the story is taking its toll on me. Me being accused of making fake accounts just to insult people is upsetting me when I feel it should be easy for the sight to just pull up my IP address to prove otherwise. Im not satisfied with the lack of response from this site so I will not post until this is figured out. Sorry for the inconvenience.
ch 108 Chapter 108: Overthinking
Becoming a Monster
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