Despite it's formidable potential, this book fails miserably in keeping it all together. The entire plot can be defined as Murphy's Law at every turn. Whatever can go wrong, will go wrong and at the worst possible moments, throughout the story. The amount of logical fallacies are through the roof.
Better change the title of the story to "Murphy's Law". Everything that can go wrong, will go wrong.
Use your bloody skills till they level up into Runes. What's so hard to understand about that?
"Am I going to lose these skills?" he wondered. "What kind of skills can I use with this mana, to begin with?"
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Fantasy · MellowGuy
Your comment shows exactly how dumb you are. There are methods to create tension in the story without making dumb decisions. Character development is when a character develops organically to his surroundings and situations as per the development of the story. Whimsically changing the character without rhyme or reason and making uncharacteristic decisions is just haphazard work, which is exactly what is happening here. The only thing that's consistent about the MC is how inconsistent, he is.
He doesn't have the perception rune, yet.
[Perception: 60]
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Fantasy · MellowGuy
He said, "I won't." It could also mean that he wouldn't promise. 😉
"I won't," He lied.
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Fantasy · MellowGuy
It's too soon to be constantly switching POVs.
In the south of the trial grounds was the group of Erin Voldor, a mighty army of awakeners that worked together to pass this trial. Their families were allies for many years; that's why this team shared a good bond between them. Individual selfishness was unquestionably common, but they worked in a competitive environment under Erin's leadership.
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Fantasy · MellowGuy
Achilles Tendon, you mean? I mean Achilles heel is literally, well, Achilles' heel. Achilles was invulnerable except for his heels, which were his sole weakness. He was killed by an arrow to his heels. Achilles Tendon was named after that and that is common to all humans.
With whatever strength he had, he slashed his sword at the ape's Achilles heel. All this only left was a shallow wound that didn't bring the ape down. It turned around and struck its claws at Arthur, who was ready to parry it again.
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Fantasy · MellowGuy
She's not a Magus, yet and her bloodline rank is nowhere near Lucian's. Which means she's vulnerable to Lucian's commands just like Emery was when he couldn't save Xion.
Now that Emery was back in a safe place, no longer under the watchful eye of the serpent elder, it was time for him to reveal his domain and show his secret: the Khaos Gate.
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Fantasy · Avan
Chris must be forced to rape his own family to death.
...before kicking him into the Portal along with Van.
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Fantasy · Romeru