Great read so far with very few mistakes grammar wise. World building could be expanded on but it is slowly being fleshed out. MC is kinda generic personality wise but the whole not logging out with everyone else is unique but brings about its own problems. I’m still wondering how he is paying his bills this whole time. Magic sword man is also kinda generic. Wish figh scenes were fleshed out more like in the beginning. Keep it up
I do like it so far but I’m gonna be honest I’m way to lazy and no where near bored enough to count words and see if it affects cost. I also hate repetitive things it’s annoying to me
Zephyrion shook his head. "They belong to the government, not to me, so I can't allow it."
I Don't Need To Log Out
Fantasy · IBCharon
Increasing word count like a broke bum? Dont repeat past chapters just because your count is short
Zephyrion shook his head. "They belong to the government, not to me, so I can't allow it."
I Don't Need To Log Out
Fantasy · IBCharon
Yes
That reality severely wounded Hwang Hyun-cheol's self-esteem.
Dark Warlock in the Apocalypse
Games · Harbinger_
Her sword
Esra's hand gripped the hilt of his sword tightly, her expression hardening. Her eyes, now revealed, glowed with a cold fury.
WHAT!? iM REBORN AS A METEOR
Fantasy · shaxheaven
Or maybe it’s lazy writing
On the second floor, all the wolves were waiting for me. When I arrived, they lunged at me, but I was prepared. I unsheathed my sword and pierced the leading wolf through its mouth.
Infinite Adaptation in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · FoolishMe
The cnversations are like a 90s Disney movie. When will evolution start? Also adding random skills with no direction so far. Two concealment skills and no attack skill until now
Keep the names right you need to edit this chapter but didn’t pay to read incorrectly translated words
"And what about you, Jae-yoon? What did you choose?" Justin asked, turning to Ethan.
Dark Warlock in the Apocalypse
Games · Harbinger_
What is the PS about?
In the beginning the fight scenes while quick you would mention terrain as well as what type of attacks he was using and I can tell the story is reaching the training arc and that is fine. Also grammar is pretty good but it is nice to know it is being improved on unlike most on this site. As for the earth side I was just curious how he is managing his expenses but if he has that type of money that would make since to put things on auto pay
I Don't Need To Log Out
Fantasy · IBCharon