Aydehan

First of all, this review is written through a translator. The story written is generally good, but in my opinion there are a few points that are missing. For example, the romantic subplot or a bigger problem is the rituals that seem very forced. Yes, the rituals seem very forced and even make me very nervous while reading them. What, it's not even sequence 7 yet, sequence 5 wants you to mess with someone. This is complete nonsense. If he was going to attempt this kind of thing, at least the main character should have been rank 5. Also, the series should have started at least 4 years before the main events started. If you have studied the queues in the LOTM universe, you will notice that they all follow a certain route. There is no need to perform rituals, with the exception of between 9-5, because you are still human. Between 4-0 you have to perform the ritual because your journey from humanity to divinity begins. (The path of the klein is abnormal. It requires a ritual at rank 6. Likewise, it requires an anchor at rank 4.) I hope you will think about this story in more detail, polish all the rough parts and rewrite it. Then I'm sure you'll create a great work.

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