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2018-06-24 Bergabung Global
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Mp0438
Mp0438
6 months ago
Commented

I didn't know about this story until today but I'm hooked.

Mp0438
Mp0438
9 months ago
Commented

this chapter is really jumbled together, with how the dialogue is all in the same paragraph. if you separate the dialogue into individual paragraphs it would make it so much easier to read.

Mp0438
Mp0438
Mp0438
10 months ago
Commented

was he raised as a child soldier? if so, his morals should be more skewed than acting like a regular teenager. this scene comes off as her manipulating him more than giving advice. he is acting like a normal teen and not a soldier or assassin in this chapter.

Mp0438
Mp0438
10 months ago
Commented

yes you are! I don't know how you found me and entered my home but someone help!

Please calm down about this. If you think my approach is wrong please go read the original book and enjoy. No one is forcibly holding you down or forcing you to read it.

Hogwarts : leveling up the world

Hogwarts : leveling up the world

Movies · The_last_airbender

Mp0438
Mp0438
10 months ago
Commented

the chapter feels out of place since Grim is on a case but then pov switches and leaves you hanging about what's going on with Grim and Jessica.

Mp0438
Mp0438
10 months ago
Commented

system of a down reference?

She looked me dead in the eye, serious as Fudge's funeral bell, "The revolution will — in fact — be televised."

The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Book 2]

The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Book 2]

Book&Literature · Daddy

Mp0438
Mp0438
11 months ago
Replied to G8tDestroyer

I'd fail that class.

"Oh…" Septima's cheeks flushed with color. Was it something I said? "Suddenly I'm reminded why you are… were… my favorite student."

The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Book 2]

The Grind (And Helping Heather Potter) [Book 2]

Book&Literature · Daddy

Mp0438
Mp0438
11 months ago
Commented

it's fun watching him interact with both women. they honestly have good chemistry together. wonder what happened to squirrel girl? not that I like the character just curious why she stood him up.

Mp0438
Mp0438
11 months ago
Commented

he just made fun of her and then calls out his attack name lol.

He declared, "Star Swordsmanship·Shigure-Soen-Ryu·8th form: Akisame!"

Anime: Infinite Swordsman! (Danmachi + Asterisk War)

Anime: Infinite Swordsman! (Danmachi + Asterisk War)

Anime & Comics · Tom_22