Not bad, easy to follow read. But the Chapters need a bit of proofreading. Nothing mayor that make sentences incomprehensible but it is a bit rocky at times. The FLs are a bit one dimensional and it feels as if the vampire gets all powers she might ever need ... and she is a bit creepy stalkery a la Edward ... Overall I quite like it, I just hope the Werewolfs are implemented nicely and somewhat monstery
Take care dear Author, writing should be fun, not a hassle. Take your "break" time, write when and what you want and when you feel up to it, come back and dont feel pressured to stick to an strickt update schedule. If delivering one chapter per day is too stressing and burning you out with you dayjob and life, just cut back a little ... I (hopefully we) would also read you story if you were updating once a week or biweekly, your style and story are so good that its a joy to read and come back to (sth that cant be said about every author here...)
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