World Hopping With Gacha

LV 11

Garrick_D

Ugh.. the original version of this story had a much better premise. Not only is the mc here a burgeoning edgelord, he’s incredibly close to just being a villian. You gave a character that’s suppose to have Arthur’s memory’s and powers to a person who isn’t even close to what Arthur encapsulates as a person. Unless the mc was just so evil that it took Arthur to even him out to neutral, then I don’t think the character works at all.

LV 4

MercenaryRollen

mc is stupid 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

LV 1

Aroa_ala

3 times the charm right? Well the fic starts weird, you dont know the mc motives or anything until that weird chapter, then it keeps being weird because the mc doesnt change anything about the story? There are maybe 3 or 4 interactions with the other characters, and none of them have an impact in the mc, well, apart from Tonks, which is actually an enjoyable character. All in all a 6/10

LV 3

skya7a3

story alright so far . I really hope that the author doesn't make the mc eage lord .mc doesn't have a goal, which is a problem . overall, 6.5 / 10 will see what the author does in the future and which world does he visit

LV 11

JustTiredOfPicking

2.8/5 4|4|2|1|2| The writing is decent. || can't say much abt updates for now (rewrite). ||unreasonable badly executed nerfs, edging XD, || unlikeable, dumb rtard of an mc that throws tantrums and whines in every other chap. || meh||

LV 1

Demon_Gouhl

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Way of writing is comfortable to read, Character development! Well it's good but he can be a little more firm. Like in hogwarts Arthur took a little too much time to decide to take action or not But All in all plot was good Best of luck 👍

LV 3

Kaal2806

So...... I have been following you work since the first fic. The story had it's ups and downs but was enjoyable. I know you have a stack ready for future updates but the Current story has become too monotonous. If possible just make sure that in his 3rd year he has his first world hop. Please pay attention to gacha too. The gacha must be meaningful and never...... I repeat NEVER ever give out useless rewards. It can be anything from a set of clothes to systems. The gacha must not not give some dirt or rusted nails,etc. It MUST be something useful. Even a dull sword has it's own uses. Again, love the story but it can always be better, so try your best.

LV 4

ChildishSin

So for me right now its decent. The main character at thr start was the mist annoying and incompetent character I've ever read about. but acter like 10 chapters all that whiny talk was gone and well he was still whiny but atleast its not in my face. Also the main characters motivation is still pretty cheap right now. But I think to solidify it just give him some sort of event that can make him truly test himself and just don't rush it you have all the time in the world.

LV 4

Mockingbird_2179

Character with a template can't use anything from said template. Makes story altering decisions, then gets depressed because he's not participating in the story because he doesn't want to change the story. Trained from the white room, but doesn't have any training. Kills a bunch of Gangsters, but still acts like a whiny b****. This isn't a story for me.

LV 3

NiteHk

The writing is good the story line is good, but sometimes it's meh. I won't say it's a 5 star story but I have gotten interested enough in the story that i want to see where the story leads. Also points to be noted Don't use the same words phrases too many times. Also don't try to stretch the plot unnecessarily like you wanted to do With the first world to stay until the very end there's no use of it. Also World Hop more frequently.

LV 4

SSan1212

The writing and characters lack depth and emotion. It’s like eating boiled broccoli—sure, it’s healthy, but there’s no flavor to savor. Similarly, while the English is technically sound, the story itself feels bland and lifeless, offering nothing to truly engage or excite

LV 4

Griffin138

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LV 12

prvcx_00

bleeding heart mc. too "good" for my taste. gives the whole future plot to naruto gang but still offers himself as slave smh bruh u have resources and other techniques to trade for knowledge u need. have some balls bruh

LV 6

Demantius

Tem gostado muito apesar de início ter sentido a falta de propósito do Mc mas ao avançar isso foi abordado na própria história e foi bastante satisfatório como se desenrolou Estou bastante satisfeito com o rumo que está tomando Apenas um pouco ganancioso para mais atualizações[img=exp][img=recommend][img=update]

LV 4

feroshin

one off the worst fanfics i've come across, i advise that the author take it down and fixes the first 20 chapters at least and best remake it completely. the start it terrible as he lossed 360 rolls to skip the 10 years which just screams amature writter starting something too big for them to handle, there is great promise in the story if it is re-written

LV 3

DaoistHeartAttack

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LV 4

PrinceOfNothing

Good enough. MC is improving, although he was very passive until a few chapters ago.