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Unfathomable Patriarch
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//The story was moved here, put it in fan-fics by mistake, sorry for the inconvenience//
It all started after I received that weird email...
What? Click the boxes to select the body type?
Want me to select a starting point?
Let me put in the name and be done with this, it's getting late...
I always was bad with Chinese names... how about... Zhang Dong ... Hehe...
Wait why is everything going dark...
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Unfathomable patriarch this title is fvking clickbait At first I tried reading this because of the domineering title but tf with this mc? What part of him is unfathomable. So an average idiot is unfathomable?
Read it up to chapter 30 something because I didn't want to judge too quickly. I was wrong. The MC is a coward, awkward guy even if his cultivation is high, he mumbles, stutters and cannot even act normal. Dont get me started on his fighting skills. The dude is a pussy. End of, no character improvement. If otakus are presented like this in fiction I hope in reality they're not that worse in Asia. If they are, I feel sorry for their parents.
If anyone is confused by this novel and the one that has Senior instead of Patriarch in it, it's because I moved it from the fan-fic section as I placed there by mistake. I thought that was the place for original novels to go.
An idiotic story, idiot MC and no depth of character design its like an over simpathic japanese otaku got transmigrated in a chinese novel and then doing what **** they always do there is system tag but nothing of system in volume 2 in volume 1 MC just use system for acting cool no use of brain and a lot of moral bull****ing
Story a bit slow to start off, MC a bit of a bumbling idiot at the beginning but there is some progress later. Not a story for those that expect a lot of killing happening.
The story development is utterly slow. The character is too flawed and unrelatable. If you made him a bit smarter this could work out. Without his cheat I can see him dying from tripping on a branch. Yeah i know this comes with character development. But from what I see he lacks self preservation. Buying useless skills instead of something that could help him adapt to his situation and new found power. He doest even have a sense of urgency. When all he cares about is internet and hot springs thats clearly a bad sign. The only good part is your superb writing and fast update speed.
Read up to chapter 43. Horrible novel!! MC is a shut-in coward otaku. Supposedly well read in cultivation novels but is an idiot when and even more a coward when knowing that he transmigrated into a powerful body with a system. Can not relate or comprehend the MC’s character or personality. It’s just tooooooo retarded and annoying. Waste of time
Needs more chapters but overall it's a great book to past the time. Character development is a bit slow but I'm hoping for the best. The mc is a bit wasteful of his points abd doesn't really train that much aside from when he was slaying those monsters and pseudo-chtulu. Also I hopr he'll be able to get past the killing-the-enemies-is-bad phase but overall, I'm excited to to read more.
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this the best case of never judge a book by it's cover but here it's title the book is about a coward and stupid mc in a generic cultivation verse with generic plot and characters and generic cultivation world like a starts from a weak place then becomes strong next arc new sects or kingdoms introduced becomes weak again etc I can acpect a cowardly but cunning or clever mc cause they can still make it to top for readers looking for relaxation or something to pass time this is not for as this novel will only leave u frustrated and with rage and utter loathing towards the mc so read if u like such things thou I not
Mediocre with cringe sprinkled on it. The writing was decent until the trainwreck of POV shifts that popular novels suffer from. From there, we get the repetition of events, but with slightly more info from another character. At times, the grammar suffers. There can be run-on sentences and the descriptions sometimes repeat themselves too. Example: “Most of them preferred to hunt though, it was the most honorable type of work in the tribe, hunting down beasts and protecting your family was an honor for these people.” Fixed: “Protecting your family was an honor for these people, but most of them preferred hunting down beasts, which was the most honorable type of work in the tribe. Suggested: “Most of them preferred hunting down beasts, since it protected their family, which was the most honorable type of work in the tribe.” The updates look to be regular, with 9 or less page chapters. The story looked promising until it hit the brick wall of the tribesmen. Instead of heading to the city and getting ready to build up his sect, he helps random people and stays with them. Cue the pages and pages of backstory for them and then how they feel. If the author wanted a more organic story, he could have the MC ask the tribesmen for their story, instead of being forced to switch to the tribesmen’s POV and tell us. Show, don’t tell. Like, you could’ve had an emotional moment with that young tribesman by having him cry about his suffering. Instead, we watch like voyeurs on National Geographic. With characters, the MC is pathetic. There should be a missing “comedy” tag, but it’s cringeworthy to watch. He has all this power and is reduced to idly standing by. Like wtf? When he was following the tribesmen, why tf did he disappear? So many unnecessary conflicts happen. The other characters are described, but you can’t really care about them since it reads like an infodump. It’s the problem of telling instead of showing. The world background is just there in between forced reoccurring gags that the MC is dumb or messes up.
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I really don't know what to say. If you don't like the author taking his time to develop the MC. If you don't like a slow paced(to me its plenty fast) then don't read this Novel. The author is taking his time to write the story in which this socially awkward otaku comes to a cultivation world. He is letting him learn so that he may eventually become the unfathomable patriarch. What i am saying is don't read if you don't like. Stop commenting on how bad it is. The only mistake the author made is that he is a newcomer if it was a seasoned author you all would be calling this the best novel...
Bro I will support you man, but you gotta do a better job with the MC. He’s is a f*****g beta man. Come on you could portray him better than that. Idk if you plan on fixing his mentality as the story goes on but right now your MC is making story suck. It’s my honest opinion man. Everything else is dandy, your MC is just not cutting it.
not good enough, it just wasted my time, the volume 3 was a mess instead of advancing the author nerfed the mc, worst of all I got baited and read the summoning part, it was the worst change of plot ever, what benefits did he get there? none instead his cultivation was reset, that was the worst thing I've ever read, pure waste of time, I'm speechless how I stay overnight for this for whole 2 days.
Read this on scribblehub, titled as Unfathomable Senior. The MC is none at all "unfathomable" and only relates to the title ever so often when the author decides to mention that the surrounding pedestrians are so shocked every 10 chapters. The main storyline doesn't actually begin until chapter 30-40 when he finally decides to leave the beginner village to look for his family. So if you don't like 30 chapters of filler and repetitive plot, don't read this.
It’s not your typical cultivation novel were the mc because a cold blooded killer by chapter 2. And the mc actually has development. I would recommend it to anyone looking for something new.
Copy and pasted my original review sue me It's a very well written story so far. The writing quality is excellent for someone who's first language isn't English. The stability of updates seem to be good from the dates posted on the chapters, only time will tell though. The story development so far is interesting, definitely very catching as your first read it simply because the character seems more down to earth and isn't straight up gung-ho as other stories of this nature seem to be when things first starts. Hopefully the character will adapt to the world yet still retain his core values from earth and possibly even try to integrate these values into the world over time, instead of just saying **** it and giving in to the regular values of the cultivation world and simply abandoning the values of a modern day earth. The character design could use some more in depth personality description and history, such as flashbacks to memories that help to shape him to be the person he is and show much more accurately why he makes decisions the way he does. The world background is pretty much ok,but it presents the opportunity for much more complex world building as the story progresses as the character himself knows very little of the world he is so far. Overall, the story is well written, has seemingly stable updates; quality story development; character design that,while could use some improvement , is presently pretty good,and world background that has enough room for it to be developed and designed so as to be complex and very interesting. Hopefully, the author takes a route where the character would try to integrate modern earth values through perhaps a seemingly quirky yet solid character that strives to, while not being a bleeding heart hero like superman or all might, improve the world in a realistic yet simple thought process, such as the 'pay it forward' philosophy where one kind act can repaid by paying it forward to another unfortunate individual as well as implementing a modern day earth practices such as basic education institutions like primary schools, secondary schools, tertiary schools and universities in a effort to unite people under a single banner rather than fractured into different clans and sects that hoard knowledge like a miser hoards money. Just a thought, otherwise do you author and let the haters go **** themselves.
it’s called character development give it time and he will change this makes the story more enjoying to read rather then have an op mc with an op system and is a super giga ultra instinct chad with intellect and cunning that make all the worlds smartest and most political politicians look like retard
Although the writing can be a little spotty with imperfect prose snd spelling, the story itself is good enough to excuse it. Especially the start can be rough as it takes an almost painfully realistic approach to character development. Some humans could quickly adapt, but not everyone. This is why most of humans die off in the end of the world setting see. Zhang Dong is in the latter categor, a truly good person unfit for war. Fortunately he spawned in strong enough to be able to somehow live through it. He has come far through the story and still has a long way to go. I'm cheering for him, although I secrerly want him to get a 3rd child who just happens to have a constitution suited for evil. He did get seperated from his wife right after smex time. Of course, that is just my fantasy. This is a wonderful tale of a kind man with an even kinder heart. I do emphasise with him a lot through the story and I genuenly wish happiness to him. If you came here for mundane face slapping and murderhobo events, you are out of luck. This is a very gentle tale set in a not so gentle world. Zhang Dong had set his goal to change the world for the better, for everyone. I know that demonic cultivation is attractive to most folk, but keep in mind that Zhang Dong is a holy cultivator to the bone. Thank you author for writing what is arguably one of my favourite novels. :)
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MC IS A COWARD, STUPID AND A SHUT -IN NERD. THE STORY DEVELOPMENT IS TOO SLOW I MEAN LITERALLY AFTER HE TRANSMIGRATES THE FIRST THING HE DOES IS TRYING TO RUN EVEN THOUGH HE CLEARLY KNOWS THAT HE IS IN A FAIRLY OVERPOWERED BODY AND THAT RABBIT DEMON IS 2 WHOLE LEVELS LOW IN COMPARISON BUT NOOOOO HE STILL TRIES TO RUN BUT I READ IT SOMEHOW TILL 55+ CHAPTERS AND IT WAS STARTING TO GET BETTER BUT MC WHO REALLY DOESNT KNOW HOW THE CULTIVATION WORLD WORKS ACCEPTED DISCIPLES AND NOT EVEN TRYING THAT ZEALOUS MAKING TECHNIQUES BECAUSE THERE IS STILL DAMN 30% CHANCE THAT THEY MIGHT BETRAY YOU BUT NOOOOOOO YOU HAD TO LEAVE THEM BE GIVE HIM YOUR EXCLUSIVE LIGHTNING TECHNIQUE. AUTHOR:YOU SHOULD ATLEAST TRY TO LEVEL HIS CULTIVATION TO 2 LEVELS HIGHER BEFOR GIVING HIM DISCIPLES AND YOU SHOULDN'T HAVE GIVEN HIM HIS LIGHTNING TECHNIQUE BECAUSE PERSONALLY I THINK MAIN CHARACTER OF THE STORY SHOULD ALWAYS HAVE A KIND OF UNIQUENESS TO THEIR POWERS. THATS ALL THANK YOU.
Overall a good novel, but the MC...probably pussy type which is okay???? So no HAREM which is fking good because that genre is pure cancer and the people that like it too most likely a fat dude, no life retard. That's all. Im giving it a 4 🌟 review. Probably change it in the near future IF THE MC IS NO LONGER A COWARD *HINT* *HINT* AUTHOR PLS GET RID OF MC COWARDNESS...thanks in advance.