Toneri in DC

LV 4

Troy145

no just no, you are just changing the original toneri, he never would protect the earth, even after losing to naruto he said moon will never come to earth but never said he will protect the earth, and you are making a character who doesn't care about humans in the slightest converting him into someone who cares about unknown people in a strange universe and become a cringe follower of justice league and toneri comes to the world of shinobi where basically kids are taught to kill and you are just making toneri acting friends with and saving strangers , out of character of real toneri

LV 4

Zaylent

the writing style is like written by AI. no hard feelings man, its just what I feel

LV 14

Lord_Y

I like it so far just don’t like way Batman is portrayed as overly supicous to the point it comes out as kinda stupid. I mean he is suspicious of people but he is more secretive with it, not basically telling the person who he is suspicious of

LV 1

Tasha_Williams_0673

Awesome novel so far. Already added to my library collection.

LV 4

LastGod

7000 year old god. put on a team with teenagers. So heres what we can rule out. Romance. Unless author wants MC in jail. Charater development. MC has seen so much that all thier teenage drama and BS will feel stupid to him. u can also rule out any interesting NEW stories. Cause of the power and age of MC he will likely not feel at all inclined to help the team unless they are in danger of dieing. Freindship. Hes so old that these young people will have NOTHING in common with him. Even comradery will not be in this because he will be holding his powerback and his emotions will not be moved by childrens struggles. You could have put him as the mentor of the team. But as a member make ZERO sense.

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