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The inmortal
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Ringkasan
Naruto obtained immortality and after two millennia roaming the world. He decided it was time to die.
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Power 
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3Ulasan-ulasan
- Kualitas penulisan
- Stabilitas Pembaruan
- Pengembangan Cerita
- Desain Karakter
- Latar Belakang Dunia
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The story has an interesting plot but the grammar is very bad. my greatest dislike is when females are referred to as males. the 'he' and 'she' are constantly being mixed up. throwing this into something like MS Word would fix most of the grammer issues.
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You have my attention now continue what you're doing.