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The Heaven Defying Helping System
3.72 (29 peringkat)
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What happens when someone who never helped someone in his life had to help others to live.
Lance in his life from childhood to adulthood he never gets anybody's help but One day someone helped him and to repay her. he sacrificed his life for her.
*Ding*
HELPING SYSTEM ACTIVATED
P.S - This is Only a Drafted Novel.
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Like your story this far, yes you will be face many critism, but dont stop, instead eat all of those, and growth !!! Keep it up man ! Your story is GREAT ! Do not drop it, finish it. You cant tell yourself as a writer, unless you finish a story, no matter good or bad it is. That is the REAL 1st step. -Your newest fan.
The plot is unique and interesting however, there are so many flaws in this novel that really lowers it's quality. First of all is the grammar. You really need to get an editor or use a program like grammarly. From run ons, punctuation problems, tense conflicts, and etc. You have pretty much every grammar error there is. Also the writing quality really isn't good. Try to follow the writing structure of the common CN novels.
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I was curious about this story due to it's usage of a rather different system. The Heavenly Helping system. The idea has the potential to go into justice and heroics and some psychological bits concerning said stuff, or at least that was my thoughts. Boy did I get my hopes up waaaay too high. The story is basically about a guy who gets op, loses his opness instantly, loses said OPness again the moment he reclaims it and soars up again. On top of this the story's plot makes absolutely no sense. The Helping System itself doesn't really ask him to do anything that doesn't have massive out of this world rewards, and finally the writing just absolutely sucks. I can't help but wonder when the Author will realize this needs some major rework. This s essentially the roughest of rough drafts I've seen in a long time. This should not be published right now.
This novel is really good I really like it hope you will update more chapters a day and make each chapter much longer ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Mc starts out edgy and dark randomly saves a child who is apparently a gods reincarnated daughter god blesses guy before he dies by trope truck-kun he is given system system stays with him gor around less than a day while mc is out cold and power levels him beyond a resonable level then demands he saves a beast he stands uselessly beside beasts as they battle his will to be less useless makes system be useful transports the beast the beasts cub and mc randomly into the lap of fl lead mc has a adults soul in a kidish body but at first look at the female thinks i want to boink that even though shes a tween .... by then its chapter 6... also by chapter 6 you will have seen heaven heavenly or a form of heaven written down near 300 times.... there is massive typos missing words and a clear lack of context or plauseable plot line what i have encompassed for the plot line is all compressed down from near mindless jibber and random endless system typed caps and yes the system is always in caps So all in all there isnt much though process of character development of world depth or pf any sort of story line much past random wish fulfillment that the novel is clearly leading too most likely it will harem and trope to levels we can only guess
Ok I'm writing this review after reading 25 chapters. I really want to write this one after chapter 7 but I give this story a chance should name this story "HEAVEN DEFYING TRASH SYSTEM" MC is stupid why keep those who want to kill him alive? he have a system why join a sect? i don't even know what to write/comment anymore TIPS to the author PLEASE STOP WRITING
Wow,an amazing story you have there, the plot was interesting to read. Though i wished this had Japanese names or Chinese since i was rather used to that but still a selfish wish of mine
Bad. *Plot armor is ridiculous. Every conflict is resolved by relying on the system. Everything(skills, equipment, pills, exp) is gained by relying on the system, the MC does not need to work, everything is handed in a silver platter and spoon fed to him. *Needs a proofreader. Every chapter is like an essay made by a grade schooler. *Everything lacks depth, everything.
i am not going to say anything except I WANT MORE CHAPTERS thank u ............................................................................................................................................................................................................................... and please add fast cant wait
support original novel.................................................................................................................................................................... ^_^ but please author's use different title we already have tones of System titles use this Helping God/ Heaven Defying Helping God. hahaahah
Yo bro pretty good story so far. I like the MC too not to OP yet. I want to know though how often do u update ur chapters. Cuz h got me hooked.
Keep it up man ! Your story is GREAT ! : ) wertyujsnbvfgthjjhwghdbhsdhbfhkhjdsbhkfbhsdbhfgjkdsiufghwebhbhjgwehfgwdfghjdfhcbfhasghfbhsbdhfhbdshfhsdhfjbdsvfvhdsvjfbjdsvhfjbdhabhfcbhjdbhfbhjgdhvgjs
Amazing novel,please dont drop has a lot of potential both you and the novel thanks..๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค๐ค
histรณria interessante,uma novela com grande potencial sendo invocador do tipo dele falas corretamente serรก um grande sucesso ser continua a lanรงa com frequรชncia
Please write more chapters a day it starts to get boring when you update a chapter and then donโt update any for one or two days ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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Thanks it's time he go home and Handel bissness and take care of yourself look in forward to more helping I hope he gets the princess as one of his wives that goes t the next relam with him
Grammar, I don't have any judgement for this point since my grammar is bad but you need recheck your writing before uploading since there's many missing word that make your reader confused with what you intended in your sentence. big flaw in this novel is you seem writing this without any planning and care about everything you write in the past. example, you clearly write that protagonist choosing Auto Cultivation talent since he doesn't want to do that manually but you clearly ignoring this and this fact seem to be gone in the next chapter. Poison body, usually this type of body should be the unique body type that could be strengthened by consuming poison qnd make the owner to ignore negative effect from any poison attack since it will strengthen him instead. but this function seem like doesn't exist in the first place since he need antidote to cleqr the poison in his body instead of using it by absorbing it using poison body. there's many thing that I want to tell, but the obvious mistake so far is what I wrote above so there's no need for me to write everything. good luck, hopefully you will do your best on writing since you're uploading your writing then you meqn for other to read it. but if you use excuse like you're just trying to write while improving it but didn't even have heart to fix any mistake so far then it's better to write on your computer with ms.word then save it in your computer without uploading it.
I like the plot have potential to grow. I would like ro read next chapter soon... ๐ฃ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐