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Ruthless: The multi-faced assassin
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Trafficked at the age of Seven, Aisha found herself in the SA continent. Not long after, she was sold to an Assassin organization because she showed potential.
Fifteen years later, She is known as Reaper, one of the most dangerous assassins in the world. Everyone in the circle knows that when she comes for you, only death awaits...
While on break, she meets Rei Hashimoto in H who is also vacationing there from J country. They instantly click, and thus, she decides to experience a normal time with him and his friends. She feels at peace with them but alas, her real-life comes knocking. With no other alternative, she disappears from Rei's life to return to what's known as her life...
Unfortunately, only betrayal awaits...
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Rei Hashimoto is the owner of a billion-dollar empire with a hidden identity. He takes a break from his busy life and vacations in H with his two close friends. While on vacation, he meets a Aisha whom he is instantly attracted to. He befriends her and as they spend time together, he feels relaxed, complete and happy, the first he's been in a long time. Unfortunately, this does not last as Aisha disappeared from his life 2 weeks later...
Not knowing where to start looking for her as he has no information on Aisha (except for the picture he secretly took of her) he cuts short his vacation. Once home, he employs his resources to find her but it proves fruitless.
Will these two souls ever meet again..?
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Hello everyone, this is my first attempt at writing a novel so i beg your pardon on all the grammatical errors and whatnot. I promise to work hard to improve. This is an original story and everything mentioned in it is from my imagination and it is fiction...
I welcome all the reviews, good or otherwise.
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It's me de magus exodus from the forum via review swapping. The title is great (I'm sure many would read this novel because of it) The plot is not bad but it's a bit confusing to understand The synopsis is inefficient as you can practically reduce some sentences and paragraphs to that it's not too long. You should really start naming places as I don't know whether you tried following one punch man place/city naming sense but if you're are creating a serious novel you better start giving them names. (What I mean serious is that this is an action-romance novel not a comedic novel like one punch man does) Grammar......m not too needy for it as long it's readable so I guess quite okay?? Character is tbh quite likable The story pacing is a bit slow Notes: Try using Grammarly it does help in grammar issues but you need to make sure what is it tried to change before accepting the changes. If you can, maybe try to hire an editor? Up to you though. If you want I can try making a better synopsis for you lol. Link->[Overturning Fate(~journey in another word~)](https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/14248413105754105) Remember to review my novel
A bit too early to review yet, but as part of a review swap, I can say that as of chapter 9, the characters personality are starting to show more. The plot is coming along smoothly thus far, and the scenes are descriptive enough. One thing I note is that when your characters talk, you tend to forget to capitalize the start of the sentence. Sometimes you miss out closing the speech as well. Other than that, there are not any overt mistakes with grammar, which is great. I'm looking forward to seeing the story progress more. Keep up the good work! :)
Love the novel. The MC is quite a great character. I love the writing, the story line and your world building. A very good and well written book. Keep it up.
Heya there~ Came here to help with a review and I agree that the title is really great as it captures readers like myself to want to click on it. Writing Quality: I overlooked the writing quality as grammar you said was not the best. However keep working on it author~ Take classes, watch videos, and even read other works people compliment grammar on :) Story Development: From what I can tell, I really like where the story is going, I love how the pacing is slow and we are able to see who the character is/wants/etc...Great start to pull readers in. Stability: Well you started in March and came back, but I believe with this type of consistency, the updates will be good from now on looking at your most recent updates. Character Design and World background have no complaints from me, in fact my fave points of the story
The beginning is good. The main character seems grounded enough and I like that. It isn't rushed and im getting the feel of the characters which isn't a bad thing. It is slow at first but I think this is for story development. So far so good. Hopefully, it gets better as we get deep into the story. All the best
Beginning was great, story good. But the writing quality is making it difficult to read smoothly. Other than that, is quite okay. Hopefully would continue on.
Let me start with the easy things. The grammar is bad. I'm not a grammar nazi, but even I have a hard time reading this. The sentences are structured... Weirdly. There are parenthesis (or apostrophes) appearing randomly in the chapters. They sometimes begin and never end. I had to guess what they were saying, and what was narration. Now the story... It's all over the place. When I saw how each kid got ak47... Even fantasy has some rules. A 10 year old using ak47, an automatic rifle that is one of the most powerful rifles in the world. I don't think so. A 10 year old who learned stuff like languages, close combat, killing and whatever else... Yea I don't think so either. I'd say, you have loads of work to do, before this is a viable novel. You can still do it. If you edit those chapters at least a bit, and make it less ridicolous. It would be a viable novel.
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It needs some improvement with the grammar and proofreading. Other than that, it is well-written and the plot is interesting! Keep it up with the good work
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The title could hook a lot of readers.👍 Intriguing plot. Story development - So far so good. The pace of the story is in considerable speed. World Background - Since this was in modern world, I have nothing to say. Writing quality - As the author said, the grammar isn't really good. Though it's readable. (Incorrect used of punctuation marks. Suggestion: use " and " at the end and beginning of the conversation. Typos error - storey should be story. ex. 22-story building. Sentence construction - might need to proofread it or ask someone to correct it.) Hope this help. Keep it up Author!