Romania 5th Hunter Team

LV 3

mozza_mello

Mmmm this is a great novel maaan :D I won't say anything about grammar and stuff because I'm not an expert at it :3 But I kinda like the writing style hehe! I enjoyed reading the MC's thoughts! :D Some paragraphs could maybe be better being broken off in a few parts, but that depends on you :3 The concept is pretty cool, I like reading stories about clashes between species hehe! Now me is interested to see how this develops :D Oh right, there was info dump at the beginning, and although it's kinda nice and helped me understand the story, but some parts could be shown instead of just being told to make us empathize more :3 Me like the characters! :D I love their interaction and their unique personality hehe! I also think it's cool how they come from very different backgrounds, and there's even a ghostie! :D Me is rooting for the MC! :3 Can't wait to see her grow hehehehhe! Great job, authorrrr <3

LV 1

Katzenliebe

I think everything in the story is quite interesting and there are some parts that are just... "whaa~t?" (In a good way whaa~t). I really liked the detail that went into it and all the conditions and stuff. But (because I am a nitpicker and is O.o) there are a quite a few grammar errors... ... o.o Firstly, verb tenses. The entire story is basically in first person which kind of (Ummmmmm) doesn't make a lot of sense (It's fine I guess, but there are some issues with the tenses). When people retell a story, even if they are retelling it as they go, it's in past tense because 'I was holding a cup', and 'I am holding a cup' is kind of different. Although there 100% can be exceptions, usually stories are written in past. In this case where it's completely in first person, it's okay (I think) because this is someone's thoughts. However, there are some moments where the verb tense switches and that's really honestly not okay because it either suggests that this event happened before. For instance: [I brush my teeth and wash my face. I went to sleep.] That is actually okay, but it's kind of confusing when it piles up. Generally, if we're explicating something that is sudden (Or for emphasis) it's in present, if not past. Like, I went to sleep, or I ate some bread. It's not really a mistake, but there are times where the switch is a bit awkward. Secondly, articles. I can't really tell if it's a typo or something because some of them really do look like typos, but there are moments where the wrong article is used or an article is missing or added in. Sometimes there's an 'a' instead of a 'the'. While I guess sometimes it isn't really a mistake and either could be used but in the context afterwards it's kind of weird when it doesn't match up with the following sentence. I really recommend getting someone or a tool like grammarly (I only know this and word, so I guess use either. Honestly, any grammar checking thing will work). It really starts to get slightly confusing in the long run and I would really honestly get something to check it. Thirdly, the plurals. Ummmmmmm (worries), sometimes the plurals and the article (^) doesn't match up. It's kind of hard to explain, so I'll just give an example: [There was an apples.] That happens a couple times, and I'm not really sure if it's a typo or a mistake or something else, but it is kind of an issue if the amount of something comes into play. So if there were two knives instead of one, using 'a' can be confusing as it refers to there being only one knife. Just in case, I would suggest using numbers as a safeguard, it might even prevent the problem from happening. Fourthly (... srry), this is kind of an opinion, but sometimes I think the description and character description especially could be better in a manner that isn't just state the condition, feeling, and move on. It's not really an issue I guess, it works (And I r e a l l y like the details) but it's kind of awkward sometimes. Since this is first person, I would really recommend freeing up the writing. In third person this would be somewhat borderline ok and not ok, but in first person, to make the writing really stand out, using thoughts and exclamations and strongly worded feelings (idk how to say it) really helps. First PoV is really good (and sometimes when writing third PoV it's hard to get around) in terms of expressing how the MC feels and all that mushy... stuff. I really recommend just sort of exploring first PoV since it's one of those kinds of PoV where the author is really free to do almost anything (that does not break the holy grammar laws that go 'no'). Even stuff like; [What? Is this guy really asking me this?] is okay and is actually good. I mean it's used sometimes, but for some of the description it could be mended into it. The thing about third person is that it's really limited as to how a character can be expressed... but first person is really really really just meant for that. Finally (O.o), I recommend splitting up your paragraphs. This isn't a grammar error or even an error, but sometimes people can be dissuaded by the look of a huge bulging paragraph that reminds them of the essay they have to write on Monday morning (which isn't me btw... just saying...). Splitting up paragraphs sometimes just makes it look cleaner. For instance having a 20 line paragraph then a 1 line paragraph/quotation is really just difficult to see unless it's for comedic (did I spell it right?) effect. Keeping it between 1 to 10ish (give 1 or 3) lines is okay and is feasible, but going all Karamazov and having a speech that is literally two pages (Microsoft effin word pages. I'm not even kidding it was this religious thing by this dude called father Zosima and while really cool... line by line by line...) long is a lot (I think the longest I saw was 16~?).

LV 2

Megana4

This is the first time reading the Sci-Fi romance genre...The synopsis intrigued me to read the story further...So far this is the best novel I have read till now...I liked how the author showcased both protagonists...The author's writing style & choice of words is fantastic...Highly recommended book...Extraordinary work, Author!

LV 4

Mel_Aniv

This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed with more readers!

LV 2

Wolfgirl1215

Really interesting story line, I really like the assembly of different character the author uses, which certainly keeps the book fresh and interesting. The description is good, occasionally a bit colloquial, but I think that adds to the charm of this novel. If you are into fantasy, definitely check this novel out. Amazing work author

LV 1

GreenSamurai

This review is after reading the first chapter. The writing isn't bad but I suspect that English is not the authors first language, but their English comprehension is a 4 out of 5. There is about one sentience or line in every three paragraphs or so that is either grammatically incorrect or just doesn't sound right to me. But I can also tell they are trying their best with the story. That being said if you like the tags, I say give it a shot.

LV 10

LaughingSalt

I like the character designs, got a background story as well. Very solid, very nice. I also like the werewolf power settings. The abilities at each tier is very nice and clear. The plot is moving nicely, and the writing quality is pretty good. Can't give you a 5/5 on stability of update though. Please consider posting at least 1 chapter daily. Don't leave the readers hanging. Also, where's the author's shameless self-review?

LV 3

bee_333

It's an interesting read,with a nice plot and a stable main character. The story development isn't too fast or slow, a few spelling errors though but they are negligible.

LV 3

winterdaisy55

Amazing. I picked up this book because I read the synopsis and realized that it's about werewolves. I LOVE everything about werewolves and other fantasy stuff which is why I've read a lot of them to know that the plot is very different and refreshing. I must say I don't have any regrets in picking this one book. I really like how you describe the scenes, they are pretty detailed and I myself am able to depict what kind of places/situations the characters are in. Also, I love the MC, her thoughts are very funny to read. To anyone who hasn't read this story, you are clearly missing out!! You are doing amazing, author, undoubtedly.

LV 1

Whannmarie

I really think this story very good and captures the reader's attention. I really liked the fact that it was well thought out and went into great details. There are a few grammatical errors and typos but that is fine of course, next time try a grammar review app to help you out with that. The story outweighs the grammatical errors and typos by far, Although I am a perfectionist, I cannot help but give this story a great review in spite of the errors. I would highly suggest this book to anyone who likes sci-fi. 1d

LV 2

Sailow_Sanchez

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