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[A Harry Potter Fanfiction]
Decades after the war Harry Potter has everything in life, wealth, fame, power, etc but nothing to live for.
Just when Harry thinks that he will lead a lonely existence for the rest of his life, he his approached by an old friend Death.
Death offers Harry a chance to go back to live a life he was always meant to, but can he fix the past while Harry himself is a little broken.
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Tulis ulasanIt's terrible AI generated chain of words. Characters are one dimensional, world building is meh. Story is boring. Half of the book is "i'm so happy that i have family".
Honestly, it's one of the worst Harry Potter fics I've read. The book has no depth, it feels generic. Its definitely ai generated. The limited dialog lackluster it has no emotion that ties it to the characters. Also, why tf would olivander have the elder wand? That's stupid af and so was Harry's reaction to getting it, and how did his parents not recognize it. Honestly, this is an insult to Harry Potter. I strongly recommend that u dont waste ur time reading this.
Your story potentialy gonna have a harem? (Some asshole antai harem sect convinced a author to make a great fanfic into a non harem fic now im going through and asking authors without any tags like no harem or harem if there interested in adding a second wifu or third to there story Second is a good middle ground for authors who were not planning it If you cant tell im hella spiteful XD i was loving that story and now i gotta drop it they have declared war So i ask very respectfully would you consider making your fic have a small harem
over all, I love the plot. But if you cut out the padding of info dumping on your magical theory , your first release would 20 chapters less. I'm pretty sure J.K learned something from it for her next books. Please just keep writing the compelling plot that keeps us wanting more. Please let me change this to a 5 out of 5.
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I expected improvement as this was supposed to be a "rewrite", but alas, I'm very much disappointed. A lot of plot holes and massively unbelievable shit going on in this story (eg. (1) Ollivander just giving thr elder wand to the mc, because it doesn't work for Dumbledore anymore; (2) aside from Harry and his twin, Rose, they supposedly twin younger sibs, but they literally got erased in the story once Lillian was introduced; (3) Charlus, the grandfather of Harry didn't know that his wife (Dorea) was sorted in Slytherin....and other bizarre shit in the story)