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Naruto: Red Storm
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This is my first time writing anything. So suggestions are accepted.
English is my third language so I am trying to reduce grammatical errors as much as possible.
Naruto grew up without a shade, protection over him but what if he has a protection a sword, shield more than that a family - an elder brother "Uzumaki Hiroto". Lets see how different that journey will be.
Except my OC anything isn't mine. Cover image isn't mine if it's yours and want to remove it please let me know.
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This is pretty good so far im really just waiting for the story to progress and ill adjust my review according to that........................
The premise and ideas are great but the narration and grammar makes this a difficult read. There is some sort of uncomfortable third person narration, where the author will occasionally info dump or expound on points like a narrator. On top of that, minor but consistent grammar mistakes and Inproper tenses makes this read very uncomfortably. 3.8/10, I cannot reccomend it and it is unfortunate because there are good ideas here.
I really like the story and am very curious to see how the plot progresses .
This is pretty good so far, can't wait to read more ;.....................................................................................................
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