MHA; The Gomu Gomu Boy

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Nao_san

The plot is good, however, the gomu gomu no mi being obteined as a fruit and not as a quirk since the start, means that he may be cursed and can't swim, that's a great disadvantage if you are a hero who will find himself in multiple scenarios, if villains find out this, you surely will die. The second problem is just my personal opinion, the gomu gomu no mi of Luffy is too difficult to develop... he used his fruit for 12 years and only now he managed to awake his fruit. Yahari doesn't have haki and I really think haki is needed for the Fourth gear. It would be great if you added 'haki' as a secondary part of the power the fruits brings but I don't think it would make sense. Maybe adding it as a late awakening of his true quirk, since grandpa did have a quirk to strengthen it would makes sense. This are all my problems with the fruit, however, I don't know if you intend to give Yahari the akuma no mi curse since you didn't share this. It would be better to clarify this. Just a recommendation of my own. Though I've only 'complained', I really like the story so don't worry too much. I will keep reading, didn't intend to criticise you but pointing out some things i would like to know and some suggestions. Keep the story, you are doing great.

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Thiago_Emanuel_2005

So far, it's very good...................

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jackson_smith

Ayaka0 Great fanfic Keep up the great work You can do this Mha fanfic idea directly after MHA; The Gomu Gomu Boy Mha: King of the Beasts It all started when Izuku Midoriya noticed something shining in the waters of the beach, and found a strange-looking fruit with a bad taste. Little did he know that he ate the Uo Uo no Mi, Model: Seiryu. After that everything started to take a different turn for the better. Name: Izuku Midoriya Age:19 Height: 6’5 Hero Name: Kaido Harem Black Maria Inko Midoriya Mitsuki Bakugo Nemuri Kayama Yu Takeyama Beru Asui Tsuyu Asui Ulti Momo Yaoyorozu Mirko Ryuko Tatsuma Mina Ashido Mika Jiro Pony Tsunotori Rei Todoroki Fuyumi Todoroki Uwabami Himiko Toga Shino Sōsaki Ryūko Tsuchikawa Solitaire (One Piece) Sarahebi (One Piece)