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Make me your Nadier
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Where love becomes madness
And madness in love and contracts are broken........
according to the concept of abby it is not the same to be unfaithful to someone who are unfaithful to you, after a supposed love disappointment April decides to be more open and express what he wants without plugging, ignoring feelings, but, who can against the heart? when he says yes, no one can say no
Perhaps very late he understood that all the time he had who would be the love of his life right next to him and that is why he had to win him back, or maybe he just wanted to put her to the test so as not to be a toy anymore.
The new beginning that Abby will give in her life will force her to forget the past although not for this reason it will erase itself and eliminate the small stains of resentment and her first heartbreak, instead it will help her to see perhaps in a wounded way but it will force her to leave If she was the spoiled girl, this does not mean that she would become an adult, even at 22 she will still be the rebellious teenager but it is just what Nadier loves about her
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This is probably the best rating I could give. I'm sorry but even though this is a few chapters so far, there are some things that need to be considered based on what I read. The Good - Readers should be familiar with this kind of genre the novel is in. - Dialogue gives insight of the characters personalities and characteristics. - Stable updates for chapters The Things that need Improvement - Although the synopsis does give insight about what the story will be, so far it isn't really moving anywhere because of the amount of text in between the characters' dialogue and the protagonist's narration - Is the formatting meant to resemble a chat log on phone/the Internet? Because even so there's a much better way of making that format, give the characters usernames, etc, instead of the initial of their names - The protagonist unfortunately sounds like someone that genuinelly shows off what's on their mind (and not in a good way) - This may be a few chapters released so far but please provide some setting. Don't just say the character is in a house/room, give us more info to fully imagine the setting, or some idea of it at least. This review was the result of the updates being the higher point, while the others need serious checks and revisions. I hope you can take the time to look back at these chapters and maybe restructure part of it. Keep on writing author, I know you can do better.