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I have decided to repost this under the same name. This was my first FF so the quality left to be desired. Mostly the same while fixing huge plot holes, spelling, and grammar.

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Allen_Walker1

You had a great idea, interesting and with a lot of potential, however what makes me leave it is the way to include the characters, the Reynare characters is an example, first with the gear, it still seemed acceptable there, then we have the revelation of that she is the granddaughter of the angel of death, that took me out of the story, apart from her attitude, it seems to me that she does not react as expected of someone who is hardly an orphan and not to mention the affection towards Mc, but anyway, I think that you could do a better job with an OC and introduce him to another situation, maybe a rescue of a villain or find her right after the tragedy of her parents, it would put a value on the affection for the MC and also add a touch of drama to the story, I loved the first chapters, however I leave it for this, I hope the criticism will serve you, otherwise just take it as I rambled, good luck with the story

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Bubbling_Teapot

Coming from the author's previous fics, this one is a vast improvement. From storytelling to character development to grammar (though there are still a few slips) this is their best yet. Visible progress is always nice to see keep up the good work captain

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Xerxes717

Great in the beginning but drops off later on and just get annoying ..........................................................................................

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jameshelner41

Well from the chapters that are available I can say that I will look forward to more. No one ever uses Incinirate Anthem or makes the mc a fallen, so keep it up.

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kainratlaint

Meh story. .. . . . .. . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . .. . . dsfdsajfkhdsakjfhdskajfhdskajhfkjdshfkjadshfkdsahfdksajfhdkjsafhdkjsafhdkjsahfkjdshafkjdshfk

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Dagen
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Ok this is a very good story and its hard to write a story in this setting. Keep going author-sama and please dont drop it till its finished. Drinks are on her and please be sure to tip the waitress… ; )

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SkyNeves

I haven't gotten to the latest chapter yet but I feel that after more than 90 chapters read I can review this book... I hope it doesn't go down hill after the 90 chapters😅. LETS REVIEW THIS B***H! 1-Writing Quality: It has a good writing quality, there's a difference between good and great. Anyway it's well written but it still has grammar mistakes and some misspelled words like fiancee becoming finance and I actually laughed the first time I read it because Raynare said "He's our finance." and I immediately thought it meant he was the sugar daddy since he's investing on them. Anyway it's well written but has some mistakes. [4 Stars Here] 2-Story Development: Oh My GOD!!! The plot feels so good, I was kind of annoyed when it got a crossover with PJ's world but it made sense because the author mixed it so well you could actually picture it being originally the same universe. With so many deities it'd be wrong to assume there aren't any half deities. [5 Stars Here] 3-Character Design: Well s**t here we go again. The characters are well designed, when their personalities change it's a slow progress and not a random thing, also the characters have depth to them as you can actually smile sometimes with their interactions and I don't mean cringing at the obvious cringe stuff😂. [5 Stars Here] 4-Updating Stability: B***h it's stable as Oxigen on the atmosphere. I added the book today(18/01/2022) and I already got an update. [Take some more 5 Stars Author] 5-World Background: The world has details, we get descriptions of scenes and there's no plot holes in each races societies. The best part is that the descriptions do not feel like info dump because of the fluidity and the feel of how the info is introduced. [Oh take the stars and leave 5 Stars Here] Overall: 4.8 it'd be more than 5 if the other ratings could be increased. Personal Opinion: To new readers who want a harem (there's a tag and if you're a #noharem person that's fine but you should leave now) that doesn't seem forced and has a nice pace to getting girls that isn't basic pokemon capturing give it a 5 chapter read at least.

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SixthHeaven

Very good...................................................................................................................................

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Fantastic_Spirit

Just realized I never did write a review, oh well. Great fanfic. Really well made crossover btw it feels as if it was an original story instead of completely copied from dxd like most others. Hopefully you dont drop this, an actual dxd fanfic im willing to see through to the end.

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PUERKO_Senpai

this is very good!!!!!!!!!!!!! ...............................................................................................................................................

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PUERKO_Senpai

THIS IS EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! .......................................................................................................................................

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Nvmdraxx

Intriguing concept of merging Percyjackson with dxd. (Definitely in favor of this cuz I love percyjackson), however I want to just warn the author to slow down the pace, cuz it gets a bit too fast paced later on in the novel, when there were definitely better ways for the story to develop over time, which is making me rapidly lose interest on what comes next

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Voidstar_

ngl this is pretty good although there's some spelling mistake it doesn't even bother me much.my mind always auto correct it. I don't know about the others but for me it's pretty good, I even read it 3times. the first time I read it is when it only have 60+ chapter and wait for more chapter.now I'm reading it again.

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wraithQueen2739

the story so far is great [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update],..,............,.........................

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Baneofthedragon

The plot is good, the characters are sometimes monotone, but otherwise not bad, the mc is strong but not op so a good start, but man, the english and grammar is really really hard to read and sometimes doesn't make sense but overall not a bad read

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SixthHeaven

In my opinion this is the most unike and interresting DXD fanfic. The MC is a fallen angel which really different from most fanfics and it gives us a different point of view. The 'main' characters are not the typical ones you see in most fanfics (except for Ajeno and Kuroka) and their personalities are well written.I really like that the events in the story dont just follow the cannon (not that it has started but the events so far are very different from the cannon) This makes the fanfic much less predictable unlike many other that just follow the cannon story. Overall this fanfic is a top tier novel. Keep up the good work Mr.Author!

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PUERKO_Senpai

THIS IS ART!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ............................................................................................................................

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Daoist4g4Z2O

Good ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

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Sparda_D

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