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Issei The Perfect Being (Remastered)
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Abandoned by his family, Hyoudou Issei rose through the ranks until he became the strongest.
This is the story of The Perfect Being.
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OVERPOWERED MC!
HUGE HAREM!
R-18 CONTENTS!
NO YURI!
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Author-kun the story is very good keep it up. And I like that issei neither like or hate his family he is just indifferent ,he don't care about them. And readers there is a guy named Mutekishufu who is spouting nonsense and giving bad reviews to every fanfic he read, when the story is very good so don't believe him, issei hasn't forgiven his family and this a fanfiction not reality. Anyway don't mind them author-kun. ๐
As someone whose fanfics are mostly based on the theme of Family and relationship, this fanfic is not my cup of tea. Objectively speaking, this is an okay novel, not that bad nor that good. While the writing quality is good and readable, and the story development is a bit too fast for my pace, the character design is not up to standard. I mean, even an overpowered protagonist would usually have some character developments. In here? There are no developments, only jumps from one place to another. Granted, there are reasons to explain it, but just hearing that it changed and hearing HOW it changed are two completely different concepts. The powers are original(?), I guess. It's somewhat unique, yet somewhat not rare as well. The power of Copy is overwhelmingly strong here, but it IS an overpowered protagonist, after all. To improve: 1) Describe your characters more. Don't just say, "6 months passed, and the dragon gave Issei all his knowledge." Explain, elaborate about exactly what sort of supernatural knowledge. Is it about the type of monsters that exist? Is it the different races? Is it the powers that exist? We know it's about the supernatural world. Still, knowledge about the supernatural world is vast and never-ending, and unless you specifically say, the readers wouldn't know and can only assume. 2) Relationships. Don't suddenly break off from your family without a dime or reason. Just because a loved one dies doesn't mean that you have to break off all your relationships with all your other loved ones. One day, your family was nice to you, and the next, they suddenly ignore you? Huh? Where's the connection. 3) You shouldn't skip important characters. Don't just say, "Issei met with Azazel over the years and works for him as an informer". The lack of details makes it bland, and it makes it seem as though it is not important. 4) As far as I can tell, the mc has no motivation or goal. Issei is already the strongest, so what is his goal now? A novel with no goal in sight is no novel. It's a diary, and no one likes to read a bland diary. 5) Time skips are important, but the way you use them makes his past seems unimportant. Don't just use one to two chapters to describe his entire childhood. This point overlaps my previous points, but it focuses more on using your various writing techniques. They are there, but they are unpolished. Research on ways on how to use them in better ways. If you don't know how to start improving, here are some suggestions that you don't have to follow: 1) Training arcs during childhood. 2) Give him some limitations (eg can only copy one thing per day, gradually increasing the power of things he can copy, he have to endure the pain as he assimilates whatever he copies, and so on.) It's this sort of thing that allows the readers to feel Issei. 3) Don't force the plot too much. If you want him to be distant away from his family, fine. But give a more valid reason (eg Azazel found him, saw his talent, and wants to take him in. Still close family agrees, but while "studying overseas" under Azazel, his parents found his two daughters has more talent. The focus on his daughters led to the neglect of his overseas son, and with less and less communication, they eventually stop communicating at all) 4) Don't rush the plot. Take your time, describe more. While some people likes things to go to the point, most don't. We are here to read a novel after all, not a kid's book. If you read light/web novels, you will see how they use descriptions to attract readers. 5) Read more novels, not fanfics. Your writing style is very obviously seen from other horribly-written fanfics. Novels are your best guide in writing, not fanfics. In the end, it's a novel that has potential, but it is badly executed. For one, there's a lot of forced plot, which makes it just barely bearable for me to read. Two, the plot is also rushed, and most events that happened happen during those massive time skips, giving little to no information about basically everything. Three is just my personal bias, but having a family only to break off with them leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Then again, the last point is just a bias.
T-this is a very g-good story NO this must be itachi's Genjutsu!! ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ๐๏ธ
GOOD STORY!!! ๐๐ป ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ๐ฒ๐บ๐ฏ
Author I give you 5 star but don't drop it like your other novel.๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Gender-Bending originally male characters is boring since the story is going to be clearly focused on getting girls and stuff. No adventure and interesting plot. Basically the typical WN H@rem FanFic for $tupid Readers who $imp for H@rems... Smh...
I don't even know where to start , and practically those naruto fanfics with family who forget, the story is as strange as it is clichรฉ , certain parts i feel like i want to vomit (using Google translator)
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Great story ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
turn off your brain when reading thisโโโ โโโโ โโโโโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโโโ โโโโ โโโโโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โโโโ โ โโโโ โ
Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ยฝ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ยฝ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
Just no. Character design is trash, writing isn't clear. The plot... what's a plot? Don't read this trash. It's not worth wasting your time.
No cap it's a good fanfic. I'm a big fan of revenge stories and making this one of my fav till now. Overall I would rate this a good 10/10 and I hope your able to finish this fabfc author and thank you.
Forced Harem and an MC who is named Issei. I am a petty person and this Review could be higher if only the MC isn't Issei. Smh... Another one of those FanFics that Harem Simpers will love and Spam again...
liked the original better ............. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .............................................................. ..........
it would be nice if you would continue this it is a good story...............................................................................
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I don't know if this makes sense but I feel this novel is both good and bad I like overpowered characters especially power creating skills but I think him having the perfect counter to all attacks is a bit boring especially because the fights would be a bit lacking, but I really like the relationships he has with people like his family and Azazel. in the end it stopped and there was no real action. but I do recommend it if you are looking for a abandoned family member type story.
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World backround is just DxD with some genderbent characters, as well as new characters. Character design is utter garbage, the mc doesnโt have anything special about him and is just kinda there, he is an overpowered mc who Makes girls fall in love with him by smiling. Story development like character design is terrible, itโs incredibly rushed and way to fast. Updating stability is good Writing Quality is readable but not perfect, there are many grammar and spelling mistakes. My recommendation is to rewrite the fanfic and give the mc more personality, make the story slower, get rid of a lot of his power, make it harder for him to make girls fall in love, make the whole abandonment By his parents more realisitic. Overall just make him more unique and not the cliche mc who makes girls fall in love by smiling. (This is all written on my phone, Sorry about spelling mistakes)