/ Fantasy / In another life, I would be a zombie
In another life, I would be a zombie
Peringkat tidak cukup
Ringkasan
"To death!" The old man declared.
"To death!" The crowd echoed.
The old man did not need an encouragement at all. He firmed his grip on the dagger then stabbed his chest without hesitation. The pounding stopped, there were silence.
He pierced around the left side of his chest where the organ called heart is placed. And unlike the thousands of people before him, he succeeded on his first attempt. Some pierced their chest over and over again before succeeding.
Princess Alyssa was proud of herself; she did not flinch. But it was more thanks to the old man, it was the most beautiful she ever saw. She tried to take note of the position of the dagger on his chest. One month from now, she would like hers to be as beautiful as this...
...welcome to the ceremony of the undead.
People would call them the zombies. They hate that word, they are not savages. They prefer to be called the cured, cured from the plague called death..
This is the new era, the new earth, where the dead does not remain dead.
***
Book illustration credits to the owner (proxi-mity, DeviantArt)
tagar
-- Hadiah diterima 
-- Peringkat
Power 
-- Power
stone Anda Mungkin Juga Menyukai
8Ulasan-ulasan
- Kualitas penulisan
- Stabilitas Pembaruan
- Pengembangan Cerita
- Desain Karakter
- Latar Belakang Dunia
Bagikan pikiran Anda dengan orang lain
Tulis ulasan
Alyssa was quite tenacious of rejecting Ziloh's friendship/advances at first, then she uses him for the duel for the title of crown prince. We love a crafty queen. I adore Kiva for being the ever-loyal best friend of Alyssa. She better scold Ziloh on the princess' behalf. Also, Queen Kathy is a badass. She should straighten up that conniving King. If I may be presumptuous, the dialogues doesn't really relay the feeling that they're royals or part of the aristocracy, to the point that they seem complacent. I think it's just my preference, but I would like to be more formal? Withal, don't mind me, it's only my preference. The specifics of turning into a zombie is still unclear, so I hope that there will be a chapter dedicated to revealing its history and ritual. You take your time in narrating each scene, and I appreciate that very much. A wordy passage is a lot more endearing than one that is lacking. Although, I noticed some questionable word choices (i.e. slum** -> slums) and misuse/absence of punctuation marks that leads to run-ons/comma splices. However, bear in mind that these grammar mistakes doesn't affect your plot. I just pointed them out to show you that your work could look even more beautiful. The pacing is as moderate as it could get, I have no qualms about it. I could just imagine Ziloh being a Hyper Zombie from the Resident Evil. He will win in the duel (pretty please). Overall, your setting is a whole new world in itself. Please be confident when I say that you're a good writer. I'll be cheering you on!
Membuka SPOILER
This has hands down become one of my favorite books. I love all the characters and have very much enjoyed learning more about them and watching them develop. I'm really looking forward to seeing how everything plays out and I'm hoping some of my questions will be answered soon! please keep up the good work! i will be here supporting you until the end! thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of work with us. โค๏ธ๐
๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ
๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
That was an interesting story and the author did a good job in making the whole story very intriguing... I already added it into my library and will sure read more to know what happens later. The story development is well I pace and the writing quality is also good. Character designing is also good. All in all author did a good job and keep up the good work dear author. I'm cheering for you!!!
Interesting twist. I like the story progression and the way the author managed to deliver the right amount of info at the appropriate time. The writing style could be further improved, but judging by how the chapters improved later on, I am not reducing the rating. Th story follows an engaging premise and the characters are realistically protrayed. This is definitely a fun read.
Hi guys...this book has a good style of writing and an intriguing plot unfolding.i hope the author updates soon...๐คI love the story......
The deep thoughts of author are very clear and I liked the book. This book deserves our reviews and voting. ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐