I Became the Villain

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GeneralAverage

Hello! Author here. Thank you to everyone that had commented, voted, and added to their collection. I hope you had a fun experience reading my third try at writing a novel. This time I hope to finish it properly without going on hiatus. I originally wanted to write a self-review when I reached chapter 50, but it seems like the novel has been getting some attention so here it is. I have also noticed that there had been a lot of questions so this will also be a FAQ corner. Q. Who actually is the protagonist, is he Herbert or Albert? A: The protagonist is originally Albert but he was forced to play as his brother Herbert. Before he had transmigrated, he was also named Albert. Q: Is this a harem? A: No, although there will be other potential love interests, I intend to have mc end up with one. This will also make sense thematically due to how low the chance will be for a child to be born when two parents are of not the same grade of bloodline. This brings the question, would it make sense to have a strong and capable descendant with a high grade of bloodline or multiple weak descendants with a low-grade bloodline? Q: Why is the mc not acting like a villain? A: Just because your mother called you handsome doesn't mean that you are one. I originally created the mc to feel more human, and this resulted in him having more flaws as a character. Q: Why is the mc's focus on politics rather than his personal strength? A: The Ravenmoon protocol for enemies is either to contain or kill. He is facing off against the protagonist, he understands that his current character template isn't enough to catch up to the plot armor standards that the protagonist has so he could only try to change to overpower the protagonist in a different way. Q: Is the mc braindead to give away treasures to others? A: If you have a million dollars and you know that someone has the potential to pay you back twice the amount, would you not invest?

LV 4

FoodReviewSnake

In a world where magic is real and people can destroy mountain's he is trying to gain power through influence and politic's when he instead he could just gain sufficient power instead he gives treasure's to some jade beauty for some braindead reason of controlling the dukedom, keep in mind she is already powerfull at the moment because mc gave her a rare tressure, at this point only thing keeping mc alive is braindead, either author will nerf the jade beautie's intelligence so she dosen't think to kill him or author will make some braindead reason like it was common sense to give someone u just met treasure's.

LV 13

IamMountTai

As of this review I've read 37/37 chapters. Usually I don't read novels unless they had at least 100 chaps or so, but I'm glad I found this as it was a pleasant surprise. My review will be short than what I usually do because of the lack of chapters as its a new novel. This novel is easily a 5/5 stars, I'm lenient but this novel does deserve it. Highly recommend it. It's new so I can't say it's a hidden gem, but certainly has the qualities to become one and hope it gets the recognition it deserves. It's very good and I highly suggest giving this one a shot. If you enjoy "The Villain Wants to Live" then you will be in for a treat. The tone of the novel feels similar to that and there are similarities when it comes to the charm of this novel. Do not misunderstand, they just have similar things but no way are they the same. In terms of gathering strength, the novel seems more political than powering himself the usual way. (The usual way is there, but less focused). This is a big plus for those who prefer politics which often involve the battle of wits and schemes. Heads up. You should read the author's FAQ pinned because many people like myself were confused to the MC's identity. The first few chapters will be rough in trying to understand things, but it becomes clear as you read. Writing quality is great with barely any mistakes and the diction (choice of words) is immersive and appropriate in establishing its setting, echoing the noble status of the characters. I really enjoy it very much, especially the character interactions. If there's a need of improvement, well it's not flowery but that's bookstore level. This quality of linguistics is A grade for webnovel standards. The 2 major grips I have so far with the novel: 1. Lack of worldbuilding and establishing of setting. While its still early in so its understandable, I do feel we don't have a big enough overview of the world's power structures and settings. There's only bits and pieces and the basic overview isn't there. While it hasn't affected my reading experience, I think other readers would prefer if the author could give us the general overview. Even if you have to tell rather than show. 2- ~SPOILER~ I'm concerned of the Mc's action making him like a prophet who can predict future. He wasn't really questioned for the sources of his information like from his father. It's suspicious and doesn't feel logical. The novel tends to be at times feel "contrived" I do not like using the word contrived in fictional writing, so when I bring this up it's not a good thing. There are several moments in the novel where it feels too convenient that things went that way at least that's how I felt. Like the father not questioning, Princess Amelia being very obedient and not seeing her really make a move contrary to my expectations of her being much more. The oddity of the Mc's actions, not really further highlighted, I mean you could argue because he's the excellent heir so no one would doubt his actions which is a highly valid point, but I just feel things should be questioned more. Basically, these all seem to sum down to things that should be shown to make it seem logical and coherent but aren't. Even Ingrid should be mentioned with how she planned to use him and all, I know she's in fact really just a silly girl but even she I feel should have some awareness that she feels conflicted that the MC is in control. Yes they are in a contract, yes shes very indebted and her position can't let her overstep her bounds at her current circumstances, but you can still show her frustration or something. These are key stuff that feel missing in the novel. Characters- Lack of chapters means that there still needs development / showing of design for characters like the Father, Princess Amelia etc, but from what has been shown of Ingrid and the MC... It's great!!! The author clearly is very capable and can make witty conversation too. Please keep the current pace going for character development. It's slow and that's befitting for this novel. Suggestion to author- I suggest changing your cover, even if it means making it more click bait. I don't want to see another novel that I really enjoy reading have its author lose motivation because of lack of reception. Be shameless. If the content is good, people will stay. It will really be more important once you get a contract. The current one doesn't stand out at all!!! Seriously!! You probably already planned this, but an auxliery chapter would be nice too for power structures, terminology, and perhaps character profiles. It would be nice if we can get some character art too even if its not official. -------------------------------------- I always end my reviews with shipping after all I only read romances/harems. Very happy to hear that it isn't a harem (In the sense of polygamy), so I will be looking forward to shipping a heroine with the MC. After all love is war and I want to ship ship ship. That said... I kinda hate the fact that you introduced a character like Ingrid so early. Honestly, the interactions with the MC are great and they get along very well. Don't make me board a ship already! It's only 37 chapters in! We haven't even seen the protagonist of the novel yet!!! I'm utterly craving to see the future fiancé wars.

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None_demonai

Interesting story that has multiple main characters with big roles to fill. I could see how people might get confused about the first main character's identity, but personally, I followed it without a problem. [img=recommend]

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Leo_Bassist

Mc acts like a smart person but actually a dumb person. The plot have more schemes but the mc didn't really gain an advantage even he have knowledge comes from now where. Also the don't believe the synopsis if you starting to read the early chapters you'll find yourself quite confusing.

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ViolettAbyss

A very nice novel so far, the pacing is great, the writing quality is refreshing ,the characters feel real and not flat and the update stability is great. As far for the world background you can find some similarities with other novels so it's a little bit cliche. A really solid novel that is just starting, definitely would recommend it 4.5/5

Eu gostei muito desse romance, depois de beber muito veneno, fui caçar merda e achei ouro, é muito bom vou guarda na minha coleção e esperar que talvez no futuro você volte para dar continuidade a história... obg