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HP - Thomas Lamorak
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This is my first try at making a story.
It will take me quite some time to get it finished, but adding it here, might make me more inclined to actually finish writing it.
I have a very general overview of the entire story planned, now all i need is actually writing it.
Now... The story is about an average joe, average guy who reincarnates into the world of Harry Potter, he will explore the world, and discover that not every story ends well. That there are real consequences to once actions.
My goal for the story is to write something I would enjoy to read.
There will be no bashing of Dumbledore or other characters, I love the world of HP, but there are things I would love to explore that isn't seen into very much.
Dont expect this story to be updated very often, or be completed within the next year or so. But I will finish it to the best of my abilities.
Hope you like, whatever I end up writing.
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well I didn't read any of the chapters but it's in my library when it get a little further ill start reading I hope you can make something you like to read author
I tend not to read stories until at least +15 chapters so I began this one today. Right off the start in the first few chapters I was getting confused on the intended age of the MC from point of ritual to then being taken care of. During the pre-Hogwarts chapters I took things with a grain of salt. There were setups for a friendship with Hermonie which seemed to disappear somehow in subsequent chapters to completely not even mentioning her during train/sorting/interactions thereafter, a new OC which so far isn't too bad but I think using the name Knott will confuse many with the Nott family so perhaps a different name, and some background setting for the MC with prior magic family heritage. I liked the idea of this Harry Potter AU, but there are too many holes with the MC for my taste. I'd suggest a rewrite of the story and plan things out better and eliminate the unneeded parts. I'd highly suggest remove the whole reincarnator aspect because the character certainly doesn't act like an adult and some things seem to forced. If you wanted to keep Felix dead I can understand, just felt too rushed to do a few chapters of it being born and with the reincarnator aspect felt wrong/forced in the way it happened.
Was loving it, then you killed off Felix right when I was starting to like him so idk quite yet how I feel. I’ll keep it in my library until more chapters come out
Author will kill any and all connections mc makes with anyone or use them in the worst way possible for the characters lives for development of mc… author killed a a kitten who was just born…. For development….. can’t wait to see how Hermione gets raped…. Or his new friend has his whole family killed and ends up raping any girlfriend mc loves…. Breed overview of direction where this is going….. Mc is also OP and clueless so not using any OP in anyway and wasting potential so sorta an idiot but somehow smart at the same time bc he is learning magic….