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boys don't focus to much on my grammar alright that's all i could say and its my first time Writing a book all love...... ..... .. ........

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Writing Quality : 2/5 Stability of Updates : 4/5 Story Development : 2/5 Character Design : 3/5 World Background : 2/5 The grammar is quite bad. There is a lot of errors and even then the way the MC " speaks " is just weird. Also the author used too much of " time skips " ... in one sentence he is one place and the next sentence he is already finished an entire chapter with just 10 words of resume ... I don't like when a fanfic cuts corners by saying ( like in the story.. ) or even not using that but just skipping chunks of info . I read 12 chapters and I can't continue . The story requires to be remade , polished and the grammar .. required a bit more effort . The story could be good but it's just too hurried .

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It's good btw. It's like a calming down that having tired reading a struggle mc books. Don't change personality of Mc. I like evil and ruthless mc. Don't make him a simp or perverted mc. Does Mc will travel other animes after tensura? I suggest One piece, naruto, hxh, or cultivation novels. I also suggest don't put too much sentences in one paragraph it's hurt to read you know, What I mean long paragraph. If paragraph are long enough transfer the next sentences to another paragraph. ☺️☺️

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