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Too much filler. 8 chapters and there is no clear indication where the story is going, no interaction between MC and the world except for the system his summon and killing stuff like i said too much filler. Main character still “lost” in the forest near town i mean come on how far can you dump the body in 1 night? What the heck is MC doing in forest hunting stuff randomly without any care for his family? His family is looking for him and tought he’s dead then suddenly sister’s wild fiancé appeared, for me its all too random Author might want to think his/her novel direction.
Good novel interesting mc...........please more update I love novels with a lot of chapters so please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???!!!!!!!!!!
Good novel interesting mc...........please more update I love novels with a lot of chapters so please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???!!!!!!!!!!
Obligatory 1 star review for dropped novel. Obligatory 1 star review for dropped novel. Obligatory 1 star review for dropped novel. Obligatory 1 star review for dropped novel. Obligatory 1 star review for dropped novel.
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First, I love the idea behind the story. I really like his ability to create robots, but that is about it. I find that the story is really rushed and there is little to no character development. spoiler: At one point, he enters the military. The very next chapter, he has already finished training, a year has passed, and he is well known for his many exploits to the point that the military feels that he has done more than enough to be able to retire from active service. The characters are not fleshed out properly and their reactions to certain situations are not very believable. Carla finds out that her commanding officer is in fact her Uncle, she cries and is flabbergasted for about 30 seconds and then she moves on. We know peoples names, who they are loosely related to, and that is about it. This includes the main character. We are told that he is a modern day superhero in his original world and that he was killed for his beliefs, but then we don't learn anything more revealing about who he is as a person after that. Nobody seems concerned that the MC, after being reborn, now has a completely different personality, became incredibly strong in only a few days, and can somehow build robots without any formal training in the field at all. His family is perfectly okay with this and does not seem to question it.
I’ve read a few chapters and honestly it feels rushed in the beginning and doesn’t flow well from narration and characters talking. Don’t get me wrong, I like the idea the author is going with and it shows his enthusiasm in writing the novel. So I’ll be fair and give an average grade for now, and change later on if the novel improves. Keep up the great work, I would love to how far you will take this story. 👍
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I really don't want to rate this novel 1 star.. but.. writing quality sucks! i'm not picky with grammatical errors but this one have too many errors its not writing errors per se but the sentence construction is just wrong..(**. I'M NOT A GRAMMAR NAZI) story development is going nowhere! character design so many characters introduce too early on the story and the system(Jade?) why do new authors always give their system with a annoying personality?? world background? what world background? author did not even specify what's the name of the world is!! so please author please drop this novel and just be content with reading other peoples novel!!
Its really ****ing boring, intoduces too many characters early on leaving them with copy and paste personality, if they have a personality at all, i do give the author one thing though the people do behave like robots.
more pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
good novel give it try pppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp
You cannot enjoy this type of basic and boring novel and the storytelling is $hit. The conversation is the most boring part, like your reading a chatbox in every talks there have to be a name to indicate who's talking to who. Basic that why i give 1star to writing quality. 10% to Plot. 40% to System. 30% to Names/Conversation/Chatbox. 5% to Storytelling. 15% to MC's personality/Stupidity. 100% boring novel.
looks like a nice novel and i hope u can release it daily and is it a harem or just a mc that create robot or is there any plan that mc want to conquer the world or something lol
it's an interesting idea for a story but the all characters seem to be emotionless and have some strange common sense, the MC develop veryveryvery fast but the story doesn't...
Hi fellow Novel Hunters, I just want to say that this book is about fantasy! Please don't compare our blacksmiths on Earth to Jaeger in this book's world which is fantasy Thank you guys for showing concern! All of your feedback would really helps me to improve! Thank you again!