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After School During Tuition (One Shot)
Penulis: Good_Light_Sleep
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Ahh! School had ended and it is time to go home and relax... Who am I lying to? I have tuition after school every day.
Wait you don't know what is tuition?
Then join a colourful cast of characters as they give you the most inaccurate representation of what a tuition center is!
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Power 
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- Kualitas penulisan
- Stabilitas Pembaruan
- Pengembangan Cerita
- Desain Karakter
- Latar Belakang Dunia
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Tulis ulasan
Hey! I'm Jackson, you may call me Jack. The idea for the story is not bad, a school comedy with the common stereotypes is great. Here's the thing though, you haven't done the best in establishing where you are. We know you just walked into a building, but we do not know what the building looks like; you were just suddenly walking up stairs. Also, working on plot. You could use a little bit of extension here, it happened a little bit fast. That's all for now! I'll rewrite this when you have more content.