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A Blind Man In Twilight
4.27 (31 peringkat)
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Tyreec Johnson, a young man died during his sleep but was given the opportunity to be reborn in a world of fiction along with some boons, but thereโs a price for everything and that included the opportunity he received, the price was his sight, he would be blind in his second life.
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This is an Alternate Universe of Twilight
[Do NOT assume the information you know about Twilight to be correct in this Fan-Fiction]
Disclaimer: I do not own the story, world-building, or the characters from the original author. My claim of ownership is limited to the original characters I have created and the changes in the story that are a result of the presence of the MC.
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Here is an unbiased review of the novel. I give this story overall 3.4 stars. The writing is good, I gave four stars here but author fumbled with story development. It read it until 8 chapters and it is absolutely boring. There are too many Unnecessary dialogues that means nothing to the story, not even for character developments as they say nothing. Author needs to learn how to keep readers at the edge and not expect them to read on until something interesting happens. Especially writing at cliches like this, it is a must to spark intrest in the readers. Another issue with the story is the fact that MC is blind. It seems quirky and looks like an interesting trait but it is a huge hit on Authors writing, hence I have 4 stars even though grammar is good. the thing is, the story is first POV that means we follow MCs narration. But since he is blind, he can't describe faces, places or anything around the world, and since he is blind, the readers became blind with him. Author should've writirn in 3rd POV if he want a blind MC. And the romance that unfold is a disaster, I was curious on how author was going to handle it with the blind MC and he handled it poorly. Sight again is one of the most important thing in romance, characters looking at each other's eyes, getting butterflys. There needs to be a mention of the girl blushing or playing with her fingers nervously, looking away shyly, looking angry, looking beautiful in that dress etc. All of which became impossible since MC is blind and it's in FIRST POV!! At first I thought, its not so bad, it can be saved through dialogue and iItresting interaction and Boom .author changed Alices personality and made her a cold girl who did not speak much, like Ophis from DxD. A kuurudere basically. It is now impossible to write a beautiful developing romance in my opinion with that. I am sure Author is going to drop this story at some point and I want him to learn from this and not make the same mistake again. GG Author, I liked your other novel God of Void.
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please don't drop have yet to see a complete twilight FF ......................................
I love it It's something new and fresh Sure he is blind BUT he trained him self so he does see in a way And I like the personality switch Cool beautiful Alise So don't give up author It's a good story ๐
Good story, I like the powers, the characters, the only problem I have is that it is a little too slow paced. Like I get that you need to explain his life , his family and the characters( especially for people that are not familiar with Twilight for which i thank you ) , and I get that life is mostly boring stuff that sometimes has bits of action but in 12 chapters, aside from the part of him showing his "gifts" in the accident and Alice's yandereism there is not much exciting stuff for now. I understand that is yet to come since we didn't meet shapeshifters and werewolves yet or get more into the Twilight plot. So I still have high hopes for improvement.
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Iโll admit this is one of the better twilight fanfics whilst the mc is incredibly boring and extremely unfunny leaving more to be desired the character interactions and story development make up for it slightly It doesnโt have the usual tightly fanfic cringe when it comes to mating and boxing so thatโs a plus and whilst the romance is seriously underdeveloped and not described well itโs good at times so thatโs a plus overall itโs a pretty good story
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yea, I made another fic and gave it a 5-star review, I know, I'm horrible, the worst author ever... but even so I have a few things to say regarding this fic. One, this fic has only one love interest. Two, unlike my other Twilight fics, this one will try to keep the vibe of Twilight. That's all for now, good day my spawn.