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The story presented in the first chapters is good except the alternate timeline thing was seemingly thrown out of nowhere without context all of a sudden the characters so far Presented are some not very used or commonly left aside in other stories, it is good to see that in this story they are given a little more development.
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Waiting for another surprise like in chapter 10 and I hope the story "Date A Live: Multiverse Spirit" can have a longer story [img=Feeling it]
no offense, but at the time of reading chapter 9 I understood the following: as for me the title is too exaggerated. of the 9 chapters that I read it's just a fanfic everyday life, I don't expect any action anymore, if there is a journey between worlds, then most likely also everyday life or boredom. usually fanfics with such a name have many supernatural elements, how the main character uses his power, becomes stronger, learns, etc. and here only everyday life and pride that the main character is a spirit and not some simple spirit, but the spirit of one of the important concepts of the universe, namely gravity. at the same time the main character did not even use or explore his powers. also annoying that the main character just thought and it turns out that rumors have already reached another character, who immediately knows what to do and where to advise to go, because rumors do not come verbally and not after some time from some intermediaries, but directly whispers from the universe itself. cliche: shove some character and say something very vaguely and wait dozens of chapters to give a hint about this character. In short, there are holes in the fanfic, there is no sense of action atmosphere or correspondence to the title, for an amateur or just to read everyday life in order to while away the time it is suitable.
The story presented in the first chapters is good except the alternate timeline thing was seemingly thrown out of nowhere without context all of a sudden the characters so far Presented are some not very used or commonly left aside in other stories, it is good to see that in this story they are given a little more development.
Ppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp Nih kukasih bintang 5. Semangat jangan berhenti 👍
Waiting for another surprise like in chapter 10 and I hope the story "Date A Live: Multiverse Spirit" can have a longer story [img=Feeling it]
no offense, but at the time of reading chapter 9 I understood the following: as for me the title is too exaggerated. of the 9 chapters that I read it's just a fanfic everyday life, I don't expect any action anymore, if there is a journey between worlds, then most likely also everyday life or boredom. usually fanfics with such a name have many supernatural elements, how the main character uses his power, becomes stronger, learns, etc. and here only everyday life and pride that the main character is a spirit and not some simple spirit, but the spirit of one of the important concepts of the universe, namely gravity. at the same time the main character did not even use or explore his powers. also annoying that the main character just thought and it turns out that rumors have already reached another character, who immediately knows what to do and where to advise to go, because rumors do not come verbally and not after some time from some intermediaries, but directly whispers from the universe itself. cliche: shove some character and say something very vaguely and wait dozens of chapters to give a hint about this character. In short, there are holes in the fanfic, there is no sense of action atmosphere or correspondence to the title, for an amateur or just to read everyday life in order to while away the time it is suitable.