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I like it, although sometimes I feel like the story moves a little fast. Also, I find it strange that Momo doesn't get suspicious when she sees the syringes. keep up the good work
A ok read to pass the time. It's readable an grammar is ok. That's all though, the MC is dumb while not trying to change the story an just following the main cast. MC is justify by saying to make them stronger which MC is failing hard on. The whole premise is to change plot ending of MHA, doesn't mean you have to make main cast stronger. There are so many ways to make the ending different but MC does the dumbest way. For reference make the MC the strongest an the ending would naturally change.
So after reading 9 Chapters of the story, I have quite a few things to say. So first thing is that The author likes to tell and not to show some things. Which isn't bad per se, but saying he trained for 10 years, and we didn't see anything like that is disappointing.(Plus a 10-Year time skip without saying what happened to him.) Second, He has the Mission to change things, but really didn't change things for 15 years. He didn't try to find Toga or Twice to change something.) Third, He also double downed on saying he himself is making changes, but some chapters later ROB comes and said he makes it more difficult. Fourth, ROB coming back again and saying that he can choose who he can kick out from class 1-A is something he again didn't alone change, it was ROB again. Fifth, keeping Mineta and not the dude with tape in his Elbows is just wow. So all in all, he didn't change a thing, everything right now that was changed was ROB. Seventh, a Mother that names you Devil and treats you worse doesn't deserve Love or affection. ROB asked him who will be kicked out from Class 1-A, and him just being better didn't make change. Then he could not even do something and he still would be in class 1-A ROB said he wants a different Story, yet MC has changed nothing. Long story short, it has a lot of forced Plot and Plot holes. Yet, I ask all of you to read a few chapters to make yourself an own opinion. Author to you, read and maybe write down your Plot. Because right now, he didn't do anything. To all of you, have a good day and Night
What the hell? Is he going to go through all this, be the paw of the old Mc wanting him to be happy, while he runs away non-stop, just for money? If he had so much capacity and willpower, he would have at least managed to get by in the original world. I dropped this shit, goodbye.
Hi! I’m Abditunz, and I genuinely admire your books—your storytelling is remarkable. If you're open to it, I'd love to exchange some tips that could help us both as writers. Let’s find a time to chat; I think it could lead to inspiring discussions. Excited to hear from you! Best, Abditunz
The sotry has a few grammar errors, it’s still 100% readable and most errores are typos. I like the character and how he grows during the story. The one guy who complain about the mc not having will power or motivation clearly had not read the chapters cause he dose grow as a character in the lates chapters. Its no master piece but I have enjoyed the story and constantly look for its updates.
I like it, although sometimes I feel like the story moves a little fast. Also, I find it strange that Momo doesn't get suspicious when she sees the syringes. keep up the good work
A ok read to pass the time. It's readable an grammar is ok. That's all though, the MC is dumb while not trying to change the story an just following the main cast. MC is justify by saying to make them stronger which MC is failing hard on. The whole premise is to change plot ending of MHA, doesn't mean you have to make main cast stronger. There are so many ways to make the ending different but MC does the dumbest way. For reference make the MC the strongest an the ending would naturally change.
So after reading 9 Chapters of the story, I have quite a few things to say. So first thing is that The author likes to tell and not to show some things. Which isn't bad per se, but saying he trained for 10 years, and we didn't see anything like that is disappointing.(Plus a 10-Year time skip without saying what happened to him.) Second, He has the Mission to change things, but really didn't change things for 15 years. He didn't try to find Toga or Twice to change something.) Third, He also double downed on saying he himself is making changes, but some chapters later ROB comes and said he makes it more difficult. Fourth, ROB coming back again and saying that he can choose who he can kick out from class 1-A is something he again didn't alone change, it was ROB again. Fifth, keeping Mineta and not the dude with tape in his Elbows is just wow. So all in all, he didn't change a thing, everything right now that was changed was ROB. Seventh, a Mother that names you Devil and treats you worse doesn't deserve Love or affection. ROB asked him who will be kicked out from Class 1-A, and him just being better didn't make change. Then he could not even do something and he still would be in class 1-A ROB said he wants a different Story, yet MC has changed nothing. Long story short, it has a lot of forced Plot and Plot holes. Yet, I ask all of you to read a few chapters to make yourself an own opinion. Author to you, read and maybe write down your Plot. Because right now, he didn't do anything. To all of you, have a good day and Night
What the hell? Is he going to go through all this, be the paw of the old Mc wanting him to be happy, while he runs away non-stop, just for money? If he had so much capacity and willpower, he would have at least managed to get by in the original world. I dropped this shit, goodbye.
Hi! I’m Abditunz, and I genuinely admire your books—your storytelling is remarkable. If you're open to it, I'd love to exchange some tips that could help us both as writers. Let’s find a time to chat; I think it could lead to inspiring discussions. Excited to hear from you! Best, Abditunz
The sotry has a few grammar errors, it’s still 100% readable and most errores are typos. I like the character and how he grows during the story. The one guy who complain about the mc not having will power or motivation clearly had not read the chapters cause he dose grow as a character in the lates chapters. Its no master piece but I have enjoyed the story and constantly look for its updates.