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love the story and it 's overall development and the new take on the Naruto world in general. The system isn't overpowered and he needs to work and train himself. I highly recommend it.
It's very good. The chaotic battlefield in the latest chapters were good. Though, Nagato should have made Hanzo a puppet.
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A very good one. Hope you finish it. [img=update][img=thinking][img=strong][img=sad][img=recommend][img=proud][img=nervous][img=golden ticket][img=gift][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=exp][img=disgusted][img=coins][img=angry][img=Your move][img=Why][img=Unalived][img=Speechless][img=Smug][img=Smitten][img=Sigh][img=Shocked][img=Relaxed][img=Out of it][img=More pls][img=Moneybags][img=Mad][img=Loving it][img=In your face][img=In a daze][img=Good night][img=Feeling it][img=Envy][img=Cries]
There is a lot of chaos in the story. 1. At the beginning of the story, the MC does not have a clear goal but dares to try to destroy Konan, Yahiko and Nagato's trust. At least make a clear goal first, don't just talk unclearly, as a reader I feel annoyed because I see the MC who pretends to know. At least give a picture first of what kind of world the MC wants to see. Does the MC want to create a country or just a shinobi village .. give a clear picture because at the beginning of the story the MC only looks like a kid who wants to avoid death from a banana peel. The MC's goal is too shallow. 2. The timeline is messy. It seems that the author does not know yet, when Konan, Yahiko and Nagato were still three and protected the citizens of Amegakure. They once met Obito and Zetsu. It's just that Obito was rejected at that time. Only after Yahiko met the bandits from Ame did Yahiko form the Akatsuki group. And strangely here the MC has entered the Akatsuki group but Obito is still healthy with his team.
I typically don't like villain mc's but this was cut from a diffrent cloth all together. It's written well, characters act rationally within their knowledge.
aaaaah divine absolutely divine, at the beginning it had the same setting with another fanfic same scenarios with akatsuki but this was delivered differently n I like it, especially the bananas🤣🤣🤣 I just wish there was like 200+ chapters😂😂
ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
at first, I thought it was a translated mtl but i was wrong. the beginning is so much alike but after reading a few chapters later it was a completely different story. either I am not up to date with mtl novel or the author has been influenced by those mtl novel. anyway it's a good read. if someone find the answer plz link
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Im giving this 5 star, To be honest it is easy to write the dialogue but for the fight and strategy it is diffficult. You need to learn by reading other fiction so you will get the idea how to write fighting scenes Well this book has intense fight but at the same time emotional scenes I know the writer are heavily influenced by chinese fiction. well chinese are around 1 billion people so it is not surprise we are influenced by them. Because among fanfiction they are the most people living on earth that become a writer
Overall the story is going very well. I would like to advise that if you are going to continue giving so many skills to the MC that he can, let's say, merge some of them to develop a higher level one since at the rate I see, Mc is going to have so many abilities that we will even forget which one he has
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Good start. Waiting for rest of the chapters. [img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
从篡位晓组织开始颠覆忍界 for those who want raw. .......................................................................................................................................................
The story has an interesting MC with a valid reason for doing what he does, he does not become OP because of the system after 5 chapters which is appreciated for the gradual development, he is realistic and takes each action after calculating it, AND THE MOST IMPORTANT THING , the characters in the story are not flat characters who only accept what is happening around them with a simple "ok."
either this is a translation or you are heavily influenced by MTL works which isn’t a good thing. it’s pretty clear in writing. i personally dislike it although it is technically readable.
Plot is great! and the MC is very intelligent! I hope for a romance between MC and Konan soon. You can add them in between scenes to add more flair.
Que buena esta está historia [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
love the story and it 's overall development and the new take on the Naruto world in general. The system isn't overpowered and he needs to work and train himself. I highly recommend it.
It's very good. The chaotic battlefield in the latest chapters were good. Though, Nagato should have made Hanzo a puppet.
Membuka SPOILER A very good one. Hope you finish it. [img=update][img=thinking][img=strong][img=sad][img=recommend][img=proud][img=nervous][img=golden ticket][img=gift][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=exp][img=disgusted][img=coins][img=angry][img=Your move][img=Why][img=Unalived][img=Speechless][img=Smug][img=Smitten][img=Sigh][img=Shocked][img=Relaxed][img=Out of it][img=More pls][img=Moneybags][img=Mad][img=Loving it][img=In your face][img=In a daze][img=Good night][img=Feeling it][img=Envy][img=Cries]
There is a lot of chaos in the story. 1. At the beginning of the story, the MC does not have a clear goal but dares to try to destroy Konan, Yahiko and Nagato's trust. At least make a clear goal first, don't just talk unclearly, as a reader I feel annoyed because I see the MC who pretends to know. At least give a picture first of what kind of world the MC wants to see. Does the MC want to create a country or just a shinobi village .. give a clear picture because at the beginning of the story the MC only looks like a kid who wants to avoid death from a banana peel. The MC's goal is too shallow. 2. The timeline is messy. It seems that the author does not know yet, when Konan, Yahiko and Nagato were still three and protected the citizens of Amegakure. They once met Obito and Zetsu. It's just that Obito was rejected at that time. Only after Yahiko met the bandits from Ame did Yahiko form the Akatsuki group. And strangely here the MC has entered the Akatsuki group but Obito is still healthy with his team.
I typically don't like villain mc's but this was cut from a diffrent cloth all together. It's written well, characters act rationally within their knowledge.
aaaaah divine absolutely divine, at the beginning it had the same setting with another fanfic same scenarios with akatsuki but this was delivered differently n I like it, especially the bananas🤣🤣🤣 I just wish there was like 200+ chapters😂😂
ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
at first, I thought it was a translated mtl but i was wrong. the beginning is so much alike but after reading a few chapters later it was a completely different story. either I am not up to date with mtl novel or the author has been influenced by those mtl novel. anyway it's a good read. if someone find the answer plz link
:)…....……….........………....................................................................................................................(:
Im giving this 5 star, To be honest it is easy to write the dialogue but for the fight and strategy it is diffficult. You need to learn by reading other fiction so you will get the idea how to write fighting scenes Well this book has intense fight but at the same time emotional scenes I know the writer are heavily influenced by chinese fiction. well chinese are around 1 billion people so it is not surprise we are influenced by them. Because among fanfiction they are the most people living on earth that become a writer
Overall the story is going very well. I would like to advise that if you are going to continue giving so many skills to the MC that he can, let's say, merge some of them to develop a higher level one since at the rate I see, Mc is going to have so many abilities that we will even forget which one he has
Membuka SPOILER Good start. Waiting for rest of the chapters. [img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
从篡位晓组织开始颠覆忍界 for those who want raw. .......................................................................................................................................................
The story has an interesting MC with a valid reason for doing what he does, he does not become OP because of the system after 5 chapters which is appreciated for the gradual development, he is realistic and takes each action after calculating it, AND THE MOST IMPORTANT THING , the characters in the story are not flat characters who only accept what is happening around them with a simple "ok."
either this is a translation or you are heavily influenced by MTL works which isn’t a good thing. it’s pretty clear in writing. i personally dislike it although it is technically readable.
Plot is great! and the MC is very intelligent! I hope for a romance between MC and Konan soon. You can add them in between scenes to add more flair.