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Peak.....................................................................................................................................................................................
Love the story and I love leo as a character as he doesn't just jump into battle teateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateatea
Start is good, author just have to keep up with the quality and the concept is promising though there's a brother but I'll trust the author for now since this really has potential.
Without a doubt the story was going well but unfortunately the protagonist has a twin who has everything if a damn Garry Stu... The brother appears on screen more than the protagonist himself Another problem that needs to be discussed is the synthesis. The description of the story gives us to understand that he will be the son, but it never says that he will have a brother. Honestly, sometimes that is not necessary. Explain that the brother will be a secondary thing, the problem arises when the brother starts to have more importance than the protagonist, we all come only for the protagonist, not the brother.
so in short the plot is just the same the only difference is that mc is just there as spectator watching the events unfold and you will tell us you can't change the plot because of fate and destiny bullshit and there will be consequences if you did just like that demon slayer fanfic I read a year ago
the columbina cover and no harem tag are giving me expectations , I'll be back after it reaches 20 chaps
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I don't have much to say other than that the beginning is promising and that this work has potential, the author just needs to not fill this work with harem and shameless things that for some reason the other actors do in their work which in my humble opinion, the only opinion that matters (just kidding) this work will be good. (I used Google Translate so if I ended up cursing someone it's Google's fault)
I heard it's tradition here in webnovel to shamelessly write a review at your own work so here I am. At the start of this book not everything is revealed yet so the information I would provide or the overall story might be different than the original. I plan to write this story a bit dark 😉 You've been warned.
Peak.....................................................................................................................................................................................
Love the story and I love leo as a character as he doesn't just jump into battle teateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateateatea
Start is good, author just have to keep up with the quality and the concept is promising though there's a brother but I'll trust the author for now since this really has potential.
Without a doubt the story was going well but unfortunately the protagonist has a twin who has everything if a damn Garry Stu... The brother appears on screen more than the protagonist himself Another problem that needs to be discussed is the synthesis. The description of the story gives us to understand that he will be the son, but it never says that he will have a brother. Honestly, sometimes that is not necessary. Explain that the brother will be a secondary thing, the problem arises when the brother starts to have more importance than the protagonist, we all come only for the protagonist, not the brother.
so in short the plot is just the same the only difference is that mc is just there as spectator watching the events unfold and you will tell us you can't change the plot because of fate and destiny bullshit and there will be consequences if you did just like that demon slayer fanfic I read a year ago
the columbina cover and no harem tag are giving me expectations , I'll be back after it reaches 20 chaps
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I don't have much to say other than that the beginning is promising and that this work has potential, the author just needs to not fill this work with harem and shameless things that for some reason the other actors do in their work which in my humble opinion, the only opinion that matters (just kidding) this work will be good. (I used Google Translate so if I ended up cursing someone it's Google's fault)
I heard it's tradition here in webnovel to shamelessly write a review at your own work so here I am. At the start of this book not everything is revealed yet so the information I would provide or the overall story might be different than the original. I plan to write this story a bit dark 😉 You've been warned.