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one of the better books on the app, sometimes the numbers seem a little out of wack however ignoring that this story is amazing
#mc has personality problems. when ansel ignored him, he went to save the the relationship. -it's understandable. #when ansel humiliated him in the visit, he didn't take it to heart. -ok, broad minded/big hearted. #when ansel unnecessarily crashes into him and almost ended his career and life. and when he was in the hospital, he still calls his asailent to understand him, but got completely ignored. -.............??? #When ansel was suspended and substitute taken his place, he feels heart ache for his friend,ansel(!?) -..............????? *complete pushover mentality.
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Its fine author doesn’t know much about F1 writing is a bit iffy its good if you gloss over some parts also a pretty slow start.[img=recommend]
Author, when you do scene breaks, system information etc.. can you please use less '-' '=' etc? You don't really need that many of them to denote a break/transition. For those of us that use audio feature it is extremely painful to hear "minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus " listen to a few sentences only to have it repeat again... and again...
Bro this is not normal, the dude just got run over by a F*CKING F1 car and is still running around the neighborhood shortly after being released from the hospital to complete the mission given by the system, it's impossible for a human to do this. Don't get me wrong, I love sports novels but this is much forcing the plot, take "Major League System" as an exemple, MC needed to stop throwing with his dominant arm for a whole year so he could heal from an injury, this is what a novel with system and real world looks like.
Nice read. Just a little more polishing needed here and there for it to be a better read.Good job mate, keep it up.
The story has potential, though the author obviously has barely any knowledge on formula racing. First of all, how is he racing without an FIA license. Second is he's basically a pushover. Then he goes breaking laws of physics with magical overtakes against vehicles almost twice as fast as his s*itbox. The list goes on and on with inconsistencies.
Great Novel, I love it. If anyone wants to check an F1 System novel as well, Feel Free to check mine out. It’s Called, Racing Rewind: My Formula 1 System
am giving 4stars for the story development because the family issue has not been explained asides from this the book is perfection
not bad, sadly there are no connections nor mentions of irl formula stuff f1 and others… but love the characters and curious to see next.
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If you can get past the dumb points of this novel then your golden. 1: How is his family broke when they should be rolling in money? 2: why are his so called friends making fun of him for working at a racetrack? I don’t really get what’s so funny it’s just another cliche with no reason to it and why’s he embarrassed to work there? Makes no sense. 3: his sister is just dumb get rid of her. 4: he works as a marshal for one day and gets hit by a car? Okay.
it has everything but it is slow in start for like 10 ch. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Honestly I really do enjoy this book. I’m currently on chapter 23 and the pacing is steady, allowing for development as well as seeing Luca (our Mac) show out when he can. The system doesn’t make him op like in most novels just allowing him to develop at a slightly quicker pace, Luca himself is a layered mc, needing to grow up young but still showing his age at moments. There are some writing mistakes here and there but all in all I’d recommend this book to whoever likes the sports genre.
A very good novel with interesting story. very good writing quality and i Hope WE get more chapters. keep up the good work author. 👏👏👏
Set in the early 20s, this is a core system novel I first published for a contest but later dropped out of. Here it is still. #urban #sliceoflife #singleFL #system. Enjoy Luca's story as he navigates the surprisingly tense world of motorsport, striving to take his engine's performance from B-level to S-level. Let's read.
one of the better books on the app, sometimes the numbers seem a little out of wack however ignoring that this story is amazing
#mc has personality problems. when ansel ignored him, he went to save the the relationship. -it's understandable. #when ansel humiliated him in the visit, he didn't take it to heart. -ok, broad minded/big hearted. #when ansel unnecessarily crashes into him and almost ended his career and life. and when he was in the hospital, he still calls his asailent to understand him, but got completely ignored. -.............??? #When ansel was suspended and substitute taken his place, he feels heart ache for his friend,ansel(!?) -..............????? *complete pushover mentality.
Membuka SPOILER Its fine author doesn’t know much about F1 writing is a bit iffy its good if you gloss over some parts also a pretty slow start.[img=recommend]
Author, when you do scene breaks, system information etc.. can you please use less '-' '=' etc? You don't really need that many of them to denote a break/transition. For those of us that use audio feature it is extremely painful to hear "minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus minus " listen to a few sentences only to have it repeat again... and again...
Bro this is not normal, the dude just got run over by a F*CKING F1 car and is still running around the neighborhood shortly after being released from the hospital to complete the mission given by the system, it's impossible for a human to do this. Don't get me wrong, I love sports novels but this is much forcing the plot, take "Major League System" as an exemple, MC needed to stop throwing with his dominant arm for a whole year so he could heal from an injury, this is what a novel with system and real world looks like.
Nice read. Just a little more polishing needed here and there for it to be a better read.Good job mate, keep it up.
The story has potential, though the author obviously has barely any knowledge on formula racing. First of all, how is he racing without an FIA license. Second is he's basically a pushover. Then he goes breaking laws of physics with magical overtakes against vehicles almost twice as fast as his s*itbox. The list goes on and on with inconsistencies.
Great Novel, I love it. If anyone wants to check an F1 System novel as well, Feel Free to check mine out. It’s Called, Racing Rewind: My Formula 1 System
am giving 4stars for the story development because the family issue has not been explained asides from this the book is perfection
not bad, sadly there are no connections nor mentions of irl formula stuff f1 and others… but love the characters and curious to see next.
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If you can get past the dumb points of this novel then your golden. 1: How is his family broke when they should be rolling in money? 2: why are his so called friends making fun of him for working at a racetrack? I don’t really get what’s so funny it’s just another cliche with no reason to it and why’s he embarrassed to work there? Makes no sense. 3: his sister is just dumb get rid of her. 4: he works as a marshal for one day and gets hit by a car? Okay.
it has everything but it is slow in start for like 10 ch. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Honestly I really do enjoy this book. I’m currently on chapter 23 and the pacing is steady, allowing for development as well as seeing Luca (our Mac) show out when he can. The system doesn’t make him op like in most novels just allowing him to develop at a slightly quicker pace, Luca himself is a layered mc, needing to grow up young but still showing his age at moments. There are some writing mistakes here and there but all in all I’d recommend this book to whoever likes the sports genre.
A very good novel with interesting story. very good writing quality and i Hope WE get more chapters. keep up the good work author. 👏👏👏
Set in the early 20s, this is a core system novel I first published for a contest but later dropped out of. Here it is still. #urban #sliceoflife #singleFL #system. Enjoy Luca's story as he navigates the surprisingly tense world of motorsport, striving to take his engine's performance from B-level to S-level. Let's read.