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Just the shameless review of my work, check it out, it has it all, fights, drama, saiyans and lazy Gods.
I like this premise as well but for now I will wait until you get at least 30 chapters before I read.I hope this motivates you
Overall the writing is good, the only thing that brings the story down is the main character. Firstly, he doesn’t seem that emotionally mature, even after all the training he went through. Secondly, he seems like more of a fanboy than anything. He isn’t trying to make a place for himself in the story. Lastly, character interaction and a love interest was introduced way too early. The MC didn’t get to learn anything about himself or try to get stronger, and the love with 18 seemed kinda forced even if it meant nothing in the end,
Membuka SPOILER Just the shameless review of my work, check it out, it has it all, fights, drama, saiyans and lazy Gods.
I like this premise as well but for now I will wait until you get at least 30 chapters before I read.I hope this motivates you
Overall the writing is good, the only thing that brings the story down is the main character. Firstly, he doesn’t seem that emotionally mature, even after all the training he went through. Secondly, he seems like more of a fanboy than anything. He isn’t trying to make a place for himself in the story. Lastly, character interaction and a love interest was introduced way too early. The MC didn’t get to learn anything about himself or try to get stronger, and the love with 18 seemed kinda forced even if it meant nothing in the end,
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