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A one shot that turned into a story. Luka Zoric receives the abilities of some of the best Brazilian players to ever play the beautiful game. Struggling in the Manchester United U16 teams he wows with his newfound abilities and lands himself a move to the German club Dortmund.
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Tulis ulasanI really like this story. Keep up with it +(Convict to the king ) & I hope u wonโt drop it like other authors :)
acho que o mc tem tanto talento de brasileiros ele deveria ser o brasileiro ou o pai dele ser brasileiro para mim seria mais interessante que ele tem um talento de Neymar Ronaldinho e outros jogadores brasileiros
I came to withdraw my critical criticisms the mc he didn't go to Portugal but the mc doesn't need to win everything at the beginning he can go through some problems and mature I think it's better but I'm not a writer you know my opinion I love it so that's it
It's not bad. Actually, it's pretty interesting. The only issue I have with this sitory is the fact that it's quite obviously written by AI (or at least heavily modified by it) so that it's very VERY noticeable in every paragraph if you know how AI usually writes these kind of things, but other than making me roll my eyes it's not that big of an issue imo (but only because in my case I'm used to reading MTLs so it's not that much of a problem to me) Honestly, as far as AI stories go, this one is pretty good. If you like football I recommend you at least giving this one a chance, maybe you'll like it.
Once you see โby AmSincereโ put it straight in your library because he always cooks ngl Honestly a Fantastic story love how we are seeing his journey
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Keep it up excellent novel ๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐๐๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐๐๐ฅ๐๐๐๐ฅ๐๐๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ๐ฅ๐๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ ๐ ๐ฅ
I really like how it happens, interesting to be honest, adding a small time skip at some point, I hope it costs you a little more to win things with the national team since it generally happens in soap operas where they get an important cup and win it right away.
If you like his other works and you are a football fan then you gonna like this. Bro don't miss. Just hope that the MC doesn't win everything from the get go.
Great so far. I love this. Keep up!------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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Author I think you should give Man U a chance for luka it will be a great development for him considering his age and, I feel his family should be around him to guide him through his mental state also given the fact he still loveโs England utd seem right for him for now just saying though
Penulis AmSincere
everything you do bro it's just it's good and I like this and I hope it's just more than a one shot hope you continue writing things like this I love all of them from the rap King to the one that you're not one you're doing the other football writing all of them is just amazing