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I think I read 6 chapters, and that was enough for me to drop this. There are no quotation marks for indicating a dialogue. The conversations are chaotic. Read at your own risk.
no me convenció del todo es muy confusa la lectura, la verdad no se entiende nada del porqué de ciertas situaciones que ocurren, o actos que pasan sin contextos explicativos solo pasan y ya. la situación del prota fue lo que menos entendí o hacia dónde va la historia ya que los objetivos o metas no se explican bien o no se entienden ya que la traducción es muy mala. igual recomiendo que la prueben igual a alguno le gusta o entiende mejor esta traducción ya que no parece una mala historia.
I like your novel but it makes no sense why is he like the biggest pushover in existence he is like izuku from mha like your world building is nice your story is nice but why is the mc so weak in character he just lets everyone push him around and just says some snarky one liners like bro...
It's basically unreadable. The sentences are glued together to the point of hurting the eyes. The whole thing reads like someone who put chinese trough machine translation but didn't bother to put the text correctly.
Best thing about novel is that no big titted onee-sans I like them but they are unrealistic, when I first read japan and young master I thought he would be surrounded by weel endowed maids
ALMOST everything was good , but the dialog just sucks , i dont know who is talking or even when someone is talking ... ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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to me this story is ok but all i get is a slave to a clan whose mother was ra pe. seems like to me that all he is going to be is a slave.
This story is great. It starts good and becomes even better the more you read. Good character development and well thought out plot. The updates are daily, at least one chapter and sometimes more. Extremely good job author. Can't wait to see more more chapters and when you finish this story your next novel.
I don't normally like harry potter but I loved this fiction and I hope it didn't fall because a lot of readers will be disappointed.
Abilities of protagonist in the story are pretty vague, but the story... 👌. Love this novel to death, and it has a really good pace for updates.
A great fanfiction, with nice protagonist. Tbh can't really point big negatives (for me). If you want get a great time, this's a great novel to try.
I love this story, it's been great so far. You just need to correct the mistakes. Otherwise, this is a great read. Great fanfic. There are more chapters on Patreon
Overall not bad, but not enough) The chapters are large and I have already seen POV from different characters several times. I like it! Author please keep writing!
it's an overall interesting story. The story progression is interesting. The writing quality is also amazing. But it'd be better if you consider paragraphs while writing the story and I'm still not sure if the story would ever get to hp
Interesting beginning. Usually the story of HP begins in Britain, but here in Japan, and from the second chapter everything is quite beautifully written, I’m looking forward to the continuation.
Either English isn't the author's first language, or he's using AI to make this novel, or maybe both. I would have rated it lower had I read it more, but I gave up more than a few ten chapters in with how horrible the writing is (It's like reading premium MTL, with all of the shitty format but none of the grammatical errors). If my review hasn't been deleted yet, then at least the author isn't shameless enough to hide the abomination inside this novel.
I think I read 6 chapters, and that was enough for me to drop this. There are no quotation marks for indicating a dialogue. The conversations are chaotic. Read at your own risk.
no me convenció del todo es muy confusa la lectura, la verdad no se entiende nada del porqué de ciertas situaciones que ocurren, o actos que pasan sin contextos explicativos solo pasan y ya. la situación del prota fue lo que menos entendí o hacia dónde va la historia ya que los objetivos o metas no se explican bien o no se entienden ya que la traducción es muy mala. igual recomiendo que la prueben igual a alguno le gusta o entiende mejor esta traducción ya que no parece una mala historia.
I like your novel but it makes no sense why is he like the biggest pushover in existence he is like izuku from mha like your world building is nice your story is nice but why is the mc so weak in character he just lets everyone push him around and just says some snarky one liners like bro...
It's basically unreadable. The sentences are glued together to the point of hurting the eyes. The whole thing reads like someone who put chinese trough machine translation but didn't bother to put the text correctly.
Best thing about novel is that no big titted onee-sans I like them but they are unrealistic, when I first read japan and young master I thought he would be surrounded by weel endowed maids
ALMOST everything was good , but the dialog just sucks , i dont know who is talking or even when someone is talking ... ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Membuka SPOILER to me this story is ok but all i get is a slave to a clan whose mother was ra pe. seems like to me that all he is going to be is a slave.
This story is great. It starts good and becomes even better the more you read. Good character development and well thought out plot. The updates are daily, at least one chapter and sometimes more. Extremely good job author. Can't wait to see more more chapters and when you finish this story your next novel.
I don't normally like harry potter but I loved this fiction and I hope it didn't fall because a lot of readers will be disappointed.
Abilities of protagonist in the story are pretty vague, but the story... 👌. Love this novel to death, and it has a really good pace for updates.
A great fanfiction, with nice protagonist. Tbh can't really point big negatives (for me). If you want get a great time, this's a great novel to try.
I love this story, it's been great so far. You just need to correct the mistakes. Otherwise, this is a great read. Great fanfic. There are more chapters on Patreon
Overall not bad, but not enough) The chapters are large and I have already seen POV from different characters several times. I like it! Author please keep writing!
it's an overall interesting story. The story progression is interesting. The writing quality is also amazing. But it'd be better if you consider paragraphs while writing the story and I'm still not sure if the story would ever get to hp
Interesting beginning. Usually the story of HP begins in Britain, but here in Japan, and from the second chapter everything is quite beautifully written, I’m looking forward to the continuation.
Either English isn't the author's first language, or he's using AI to make this novel, or maybe both. I would have rated it lower had I read it more, but I gave up more than a few ten chapters in with how horrible the writing is (It's like reading premium MTL, with all of the shitty format but none of the grammatical errors). If my review hasn't been deleted yet, then at least the author isn't shameless enough to hide the abomination inside this novel.