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It feels like it's written by/with an AI, already the word ensemble is used for no reason in chapter 2 since Ethan is in a monologue this word shouldn't have been used but it remained after checking that the The author had to do. then the excessive verbose babble which doesn't mean much, but which is symptomatic of AI, almost 90% of the chapter is just that and is a good throwaway. I'm not going to do this to myself for one more chapter. It's shameful to ask people to pay for such poor work.
I evaluated the quality of writing as best I could, after all, errors could be due to the poor translation of the webnovel. But other than that, anyone reading this should be aware that the MC will have a relationship with Peggy instead of Captain America.l(at least as far as I read). Apart from everything I mentioned, a great fanfic with an interesting proposal, a very human protagonist, although I think him getting the super soldier serum is a bit "forced", but we pretend it isn't.
In the first couple of chapters, the author waxes poetic about a bunch of stuff, as opposed to just establishing the meat and potatoes of the story. The following chapters are much better. I found myself continuing on to the next chapter and then suddenly disappointed there were no more. There are some plot holes and weird character relations/connections that don't make sense, but those can be addressed in a update or a future chapter "flashback." It read a bit like the author started off free thought writing and then found a direction. Only a few typos or run ons. Grammer is good. I donated stones and added to the library because the author and story both have a lot of potential, and it hasn't turned into wu shu, face slapping the young master, gotta catch 'em all Pokémon, yet. I look forward to more chapters. A way the author can ensure the story stays on track and avoids a lot of plot holes is to get a large piece of paper or a white board, then write out how you want the beginning and ending of your story to go. Next, fill in the major arcs or highpoint incidents of the story. Finally, on a separate piece of paper for each arc, add in the major details, character development and characters you want your MC to accomplish/meet. Don't forget to add in failures, road blocks, and setbacks for your MC.
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do have anything to do with thefanficGod? same annoying writing full of explanations
It feels like it's written by/with an AI, already the word ensemble is used for no reason in chapter 2 since Ethan is in a monologue this word shouldn't have been used but it remained after checking that the The author had to do. then the excessive verbose babble which doesn't mean much, but which is symptomatic of AI, almost 90% of the chapter is just that and is a good throwaway. I'm not going to do this to myself for one more chapter. It's shameful to ask people to pay for such poor work.
I evaluated the quality of writing as best I could, after all, errors could be due to the poor translation of the webnovel. But other than that, anyone reading this should be aware that the MC will have a relationship with Peggy instead of Captain America.l(at least as far as I read). Apart from everything I mentioned, a great fanfic with an interesting proposal, a very human protagonist, although I think him getting the super soldier serum is a bit "forced", but we pretend it isn't.
In the first couple of chapters, the author waxes poetic about a bunch of stuff, as opposed to just establishing the meat and potatoes of the story. The following chapters are much better. I found myself continuing on to the next chapter and then suddenly disappointed there were no more. There are some plot holes and weird character relations/connections that don't make sense, but those can be addressed in a update or a future chapter "flashback." It read a bit like the author started off free thought writing and then found a direction. Only a few typos or run ons. Grammer is good. I donated stones and added to the library because the author and story both have a lot of potential, and it hasn't turned into wu shu, face slapping the young master, gotta catch 'em all Pokémon, yet. I look forward to more chapters. A way the author can ensure the story stays on track and avoids a lot of plot holes is to get a large piece of paper or a white board, then write out how you want the beginning and ending of your story to go. Next, fill in the major arcs or highpoint incidents of the story. Finally, on a separate piece of paper for each arc, add in the major details, character development and characters you want your MC to accomplish/meet. Don't forget to add in failures, road blocks, and setbacks for your MC.
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do have anything to do with thefanficGod? same annoying writing full of explanations