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I enjoyed the fanfic quite a bit but am dropping it for a few reasons: - He is a massive simp and anytime his familia hits him, abandons him or does something similar the most he seems to do is tell them off and give a small punishment, also Riveria just acts kind of abusive - He may be a god but he acts like he is weaker than everyone he comes across, (not in a humble way, or in a hide-your-power way) in a way where everyone looks down on him, manhandles him and he does nothing, -Also the way they both act seems strange to me, especially regarding certain topics, like paul, where Riveria seems to hate him despite maybe knowing the future ((he dies for rudeus) I am not sure when that episode came out) and also genuinely loves his family. Also Riveria didn't know what elinalise was doing but they talk about similar things a lot? -This is more personal preference, but I was expecting more of a focus on Danmichi and building and developing his familia rather then just jumping right into another world Best of luck to the author, and I may come back eventually, but as of right now, it isn't my thing
I enjoyed this series and I hope it continues. please tell me this not going to be dropped
All hail The golden beast! All hail Monarch of Destruction! All hail The Beguiling Light!
I like MC's decision to choose to only be with Riveria, I hope there will be another update
Cada vez más mejor, considerando que es tu primer libro es bastante genial. La relación con el mc y riveria es muy buena, no es como otros que buscan el harem o literalmente son de abofetear todo a su paso, es muy buena historia ...............................
Good none system Danmachi fanfic please keep up the good work [img=recommend][img=update][img=update]
One of the good Danmachi fanfics out there. Thanks author, I hope you keep up the good work and updates. What I really liked about the story is the pacing. Neither too fast or slow. It dwells on events sufficiently long enough. The second is the characters, I love the author's choice of characters as rarely have I seen fanfics about them. Third is the plot, although there is not much conflict with the main character as he is OP as F*** the members of the Familia and their conflict makes up for it. I also like how the author included world hopping which is a good source of conflict in both the main character and his Familia (Although he is overpowered, he is not the only one). Fourth, the side characters. They are somewhat dynamic. They have different perspectives about the MC. some fear him, some respects him, some loves him, some treats him like a friend. Both within his Familia and outside of it has their own opinion on the MC. Not all women act like sexual deviants when they see him like what I usually see authors doing in Fanfics like this. I like it. It makes the story feel more nuanced and not just revolve around one singular character. Lastly, the main character, tbh I kinda like him a bit. It is rare to see a literal God as a MC (With both power and perspective) from the beginning of the story. It usually starts with the main character being weak then ascending to godhood and with all the drama in between that sometimes fail to deliver but in this story, the main character is already a God. He is already powerful and his perspective is also akin to that of a god though of course he still sometimes exhibit human behavior as he was formerly human. His personality is somewhat akin to Hermes, he likes to joke around but in important moments he becomes scheming and serious. Overall, good fanfic. Rating: 9/10 (Read it)
This is a unique danmachi fanfic because it takes a god's perspective, whereas most danmachi fanfics take an adventurer's perspective.I just hope the chapter updates are consistent.
The Updating stability and accuracy of world background is the only thing carrying this review. Charachter design is trash Nunu xD and Akros_Zero have already said what i wanted to say about that. The story development has picked up pace but its still just slice of life with plot not empire building or familia building for that matter. so a three 🌟 ⭐️🌟 Writing quality is also three stars as inconsistency is ever present but nothing too much to flame about a free fanfic 🌟⭐️🌟
A good fic that's worth reading, but it has some minor problems and although the story is good it's not very incredible, that's why I'm giving it 4 stars. My biggest complaint would be that the author uses so much Chinese terminology that I wouldn't be surprised if it was a very good translation or a Chinese author writing in English. There's even a chapter where a danmachi swordswoman feels satisfied after a duel because it greatly improved her sword cultivation (note that she actually called it sword cultivation).
Честно сказать я не ожидал многого, но после прочтения (прочитал и не заметил как втянулся) я теперь понимаю что это один из лучших по данмачи♡♡♡ автор, пожалуйста не бросай>_< я редко когда оставляю отзывы, но этому произведению оставить обязан[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
TRUTH THIS NOVEL IS EPIC AND FUN TO READ NO BS WHEN YOU READ YOU HAVE FUN BECAUSE IT HAS A STORY TO TELL YOU.I LOVE THE CHEMISTRY BETWEEN THE CHARACTERS IT WAS FUN AND THE PLOT STORY IS DONE RIGHT WITH A LOT OF POTENTIAL FOR A BIGGER UNIVERSE ..SO I HOPE IN THE FUTURE THIS STORY GOES BIG BECAUSE IT HAS THAT ELEMENT. I LOVE THIS NOVEL SO YOU WILL TOO.
I like this book .................actually that's all I want to say, but web novels don't allow comments with a small number of words, so let's mention the good points, the number of words for 1 chapter of this book is very long 2000-5000 words, multiverse novel, characters written appropriately like the original, cultured MC, then a comedian who I think is quite funny....
One of the few good non-harem fanfics left in this platform, keep up the work author!
I would be very blunt about this fiction. It's interesting and good all said but Mc is a trash. He is supposedly million years old and has a god like mindset, which I see none in him. Secondly, he whines like a child, and acts submissive in front of Riveria. I get it you wanna make a Mc that doesn't acts like he his on high, but realize what the heck you have made. You say he sees her as wife so he acts like that, but actually that's totally wrong. They aren't hudband and wife and secondly making romance so slow, not to mention. Riveria blames him for everything, like it's his kistake they aren't getting members, etc. In the end he have become a outlet for her frustration, the character development and world background both suck. Otherwise it's good, and well since the main part of it sucks anyway, I don't know what you should expect. You can try to make a rewrite considering you have a very low number of chaps. You will need to plan for the lore, plot and things more. Lastly, you gotta focus on Mc's personality. He should have been a bit of aloof, cold yet kind personality as a God of light. Riveria should have developed a crush on him, and he as well. That's how romance have progressed. I will be blunt, this isn't quite good. but you can try to make it better for your future readers. Anyway I will be leaving. -Akros peace out...
Hello how are you thank you very much for the chapter yes more chapters come on come on more chapters come on come on
I like the way this story is going the main character is OP but not to the point where it ruins the story.
Me gustó, además la protagonista femenina es rivera 💚💚 ............................................................................,.........................................,...................
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I like this book ........ actually that's all I want to say, but web novels don't allow comments with a small number of words, so let's mention the good points, the number of words for 1 chapter of this book is very long 2000 -5000 words, multiverse novel, characters written appropriately like the original, cultured MC, then a comedian who I think is quite funny....
Well, as is customary, I come to leave my own 5 stars. This work is a personal project. I've read many novels, and after reading so much, I thought, I can do one too. With that idea, I embark on this journey, my first novel and my first experience. So I hope you'll be patient with me. I accept suggestions and advice. I hope you like the work!
I enjoyed the fanfic quite a bit but am dropping it for a few reasons: - He is a massive simp and anytime his familia hits him, abandons him or does something similar the most he seems to do is tell them off and give a small punishment, also Riveria just acts kind of abusive - He may be a god but he acts like he is weaker than everyone he comes across, (not in a humble way, or in a hide-your-power way) in a way where everyone looks down on him, manhandles him and he does nothing, -Also the way they both act seems strange to me, especially regarding certain topics, like paul, where Riveria seems to hate him despite maybe knowing the future ((he dies for rudeus) I am not sure when that episode came out) and also genuinely loves his family. Also Riveria didn't know what elinalise was doing but they talk about similar things a lot? -This is more personal preference, but I was expecting more of a focus on Danmichi and building and developing his familia rather then just jumping right into another world Best of luck to the author, and I may come back eventually, but as of right now, it isn't my thing
I enjoyed this series and I hope it continues. please tell me this not going to be dropped
All hail The golden beast! All hail Monarch of Destruction! All hail The Beguiling Light!
I like MC's decision to choose to only be with Riveria, I hope there will be another update
Cada vez más mejor, considerando que es tu primer libro es bastante genial. La relación con el mc y riveria es muy buena, no es como otros que buscan el harem o literalmente son de abofetear todo a su paso, es muy buena historia ...............................
Good none system Danmachi fanfic please keep up the good work [img=recommend][img=update][img=update]
One of the good Danmachi fanfics out there. Thanks author, I hope you keep up the good work and updates. What I really liked about the story is the pacing. Neither too fast or slow. It dwells on events sufficiently long enough. The second is the characters, I love the author's choice of characters as rarely have I seen fanfics about them. Third is the plot, although there is not much conflict with the main character as he is OP as F*** the members of the Familia and their conflict makes up for it. I also like how the author included world hopping which is a good source of conflict in both the main character and his Familia (Although he is overpowered, he is not the only one). Fourth, the side characters. They are somewhat dynamic. They have different perspectives about the MC. some fear him, some respects him, some loves him, some treats him like a friend. Both within his Familia and outside of it has their own opinion on the MC. Not all women act like sexual deviants when they see him like what I usually see authors doing in Fanfics like this. I like it. It makes the story feel more nuanced and not just revolve around one singular character. Lastly, the main character, tbh I kinda like him a bit. It is rare to see a literal God as a MC (With both power and perspective) from the beginning of the story. It usually starts with the main character being weak then ascending to godhood and with all the drama in between that sometimes fail to deliver but in this story, the main character is already a God. He is already powerful and his perspective is also akin to that of a god though of course he still sometimes exhibit human behavior as he was formerly human. His personality is somewhat akin to Hermes, he likes to joke around but in important moments he becomes scheming and serious. Overall, good fanfic. Rating: 9/10 (Read it)
This is a unique danmachi fanfic because it takes a god's perspective, whereas most danmachi fanfics take an adventurer's perspective.I just hope the chapter updates are consistent.
The Updating stability and accuracy of world background is the only thing carrying this review. Charachter design is trash Nunu xD and Akros_Zero have already said what i wanted to say about that. The story development has picked up pace but its still just slice of life with plot not empire building or familia building for that matter. so a three 🌟 ⭐️🌟 Writing quality is also three stars as inconsistency is ever present but nothing too much to flame about a free fanfic 🌟⭐️🌟
A good fic that's worth reading, but it has some minor problems and although the story is good it's not very incredible, that's why I'm giving it 4 stars. My biggest complaint would be that the author uses so much Chinese terminology that I wouldn't be surprised if it was a very good translation or a Chinese author writing in English. There's even a chapter where a danmachi swordswoman feels satisfied after a duel because it greatly improved her sword cultivation (note that she actually called it sword cultivation).
Честно сказать я не ожидал многого, но после прочтения (прочитал и не заметил как втянулся) я теперь понимаю что это один из лучших по данмачи♡♡♡ автор, пожалуйста не бросай>_< я редко когда оставляю отзывы, но этому произведению оставить обязан[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
TRUTH THIS NOVEL IS EPIC AND FUN TO READ NO BS WHEN YOU READ YOU HAVE FUN BECAUSE IT HAS A STORY TO TELL YOU.I LOVE THE CHEMISTRY BETWEEN THE CHARACTERS IT WAS FUN AND THE PLOT STORY IS DONE RIGHT WITH A LOT OF POTENTIAL FOR A BIGGER UNIVERSE ..SO I HOPE IN THE FUTURE THIS STORY GOES BIG BECAUSE IT HAS THAT ELEMENT. I LOVE THIS NOVEL SO YOU WILL TOO.
I like this book .................actually that's all I want to say, but web novels don't allow comments with a small number of words, so let's mention the good points, the number of words for 1 chapter of this book is very long 2000-5000 words, multiverse novel, characters written appropriately like the original, cultured MC, then a comedian who I think is quite funny....
One of the few good non-harem fanfics left in this platform, keep up the work author!
I would be very blunt about this fiction. It's interesting and good all said but Mc is a trash. He is supposedly million years old and has a god like mindset, which I see none in him. Secondly, he whines like a child, and acts submissive in front of Riveria. I get it you wanna make a Mc that doesn't acts like he his on high, but realize what the heck you have made. You say he sees her as wife so he acts like that, but actually that's totally wrong. They aren't hudband and wife and secondly making romance so slow, not to mention. Riveria blames him for everything, like it's his kistake they aren't getting members, etc. In the end he have become a outlet for her frustration, the character development and world background both suck. Otherwise it's good, and well since the main part of it sucks anyway, I don't know what you should expect. You can try to make a rewrite considering you have a very low number of chaps. You will need to plan for the lore, plot and things more. Lastly, you gotta focus on Mc's personality. He should have been a bit of aloof, cold yet kind personality as a God of light. Riveria should have developed a crush on him, and he as well. That's how romance have progressed. I will be blunt, this isn't quite good. but you can try to make it better for your future readers. Anyway I will be leaving. -Akros peace out...
Hello how are you thank you very much for the chapter yes more chapters come on come on more chapters come on come on
I like the way this story is going the main character is OP but not to the point where it ruins the story.
Me gustó, además la protagonista femenina es rivera 💚💚 ............................................................................,.........................................,...................
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I like this book ........ actually that's all I want to say, but web novels don't allow comments with a small number of words, so let's mention the good points, the number of words for 1 chapter of this book is very long 2000 -5000 words, multiverse novel, characters written appropriately like the original, cultured MC, then a comedian who I think is quite funny....
Well, as is customary, I come to leave my own 5 stars. This work is a personal project. I've read many novels, and after reading so much, I thought, I can do one too. With that idea, I embark on this journey, my first novel and my first experience. So I hope you'll be patient with me. I accept suggestions and advice. I hope you like the work!