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This novel is good so far, I can understand and visualize the scenes clearly. I read the synopsis and despite the short length, the story is fairly simple to follow and read. I like the idea of arranged marriage and how it can negatively impact the relationships between families and friends around. My only complaints I guess would be about the dialogue and splitting of scenes, along with backstories. Have you tried making a timeline of past events? Writing flashback scenes can be quite difficult, so if you aren’t a professional or an expert I suggest narrating everything from the beginning instead of inserting a random flashback scene of Camille and Neil falling in love. The dialogue also seems inauthentic in a way where the sentences are too detailed in terms of word choice. I suggest breaking down your dialogue into shorter sentences. Make as many sentences as possible but ensure that they aren’t too long, otherwise your characters may not feel like real people speaking. Anyways, those are the only weaknesses I can spot so far. The rest is good, I like the presence of emotions within the characters that I can visibly distinguish who is speaking. Romance, bad boys, and angels aren’t really my type of thing, but based on me reading your novels I can distinguish your style and taste that it stands out for me. Keep it up! And if you have any concerns, feel free to message me in the forums or on the server. All the best!
A great start to an amazing romance, the descriptions are on point and the narration is authentic, you can feel the frustrations she had with her assigned lover and desire to escape it all, the first chapter leaves many questions that would make anyone want to read more! What happened between her and her ex best friend now fiance, what was the job she was assigned etc etc. This is a new and completely unique novel in the genre and Im excited to see where it leads
Another great Story from a talented writer! The story is off to a great start, I will continue to read thanks for the awesome content.
Off to a pretty good start author, I'm impressed and I'm also angry 😡 Niel.... i dont't like him anymore, unless he has some good character development for the next 5 chapters I'm not gonna be on his side anymore... anyways thanks for the good read Author
yeaaaah girl keep cooking you can do it, i believe in you! haters gonna hate, but you will reach success! go on, never stop! and never ever ever misspell your and you're!
This novel is good so far, I can understand and visualize the scenes clearly. I read the synopsis and despite the short length, the story is fairly simple to follow and read. I like the idea of arranged marriage and how it can negatively impact the relationships between families and friends around. My only complaints I guess would be about the dialogue and splitting of scenes, along with backstories. Have you tried making a timeline of past events? Writing flashback scenes can be quite difficult, so if you aren’t a professional or an expert I suggest narrating everything from the beginning instead of inserting a random flashback scene of Camille and Neil falling in love. The dialogue also seems inauthentic in a way where the sentences are too detailed in terms of word choice. I suggest breaking down your dialogue into shorter sentences. Make as many sentences as possible but ensure that they aren’t too long, otherwise your characters may not feel like real people speaking. Anyways, those are the only weaknesses I can spot so far. The rest is good, I like the presence of emotions within the characters that I can visibly distinguish who is speaking. Romance, bad boys, and angels aren’t really my type of thing, but based on me reading your novels I can distinguish your style and taste that it stands out for me. Keep it up! And if you have any concerns, feel free to message me in the forums or on the server. All the best!
A great start to an amazing romance, the descriptions are on point and the narration is authentic, you can feel the frustrations she had with her assigned lover and desire to escape it all, the first chapter leaves many questions that would make anyone want to read more! What happened between her and her ex best friend now fiance, what was the job she was assigned etc etc. This is a new and completely unique novel in the genre and Im excited to see where it leads
Another great Story from a talented writer! The story is off to a great start, I will continue to read thanks for the awesome content.
Off to a pretty good start author, I'm impressed and I'm also angry 😡 Niel.... i dont't like him anymore, unless he has some good character development for the next 5 chapters I'm not gonna be on his side anymore... anyways thanks for the good read Author
yeaaaah girl keep cooking you can do it, i believe in you! haters gonna hate, but you will reach success! go on, never stop! and never ever ever misspell your and you're!