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What was written in 76 chapters I could write in 3. The amount of water (or useless text) in this story is about the same as the Earth, actually probably more since earth is only 71% water and this feels like 95% filler. If you think naruto was bad, then boy are you in for a treat. Its SUPER slice of life, MC is still level 1 @ch76, barely dungeon dives. Only decent thing about it is grammar tbh. Below average tbh.
It's a great story. The character is not obnoxious in spite of lacking feelings. My only problem is that it's extremely grandiloquent at time
I really enjoyed the story, it may have a few flaws but its still good, the character development is good too -sorry, my english is my third language
I love it for its writing style cuz most FANFICS out there is unreadable. I'm not one to judge grammar cuz mine also sucks, but at least if they want people to enjoy their works, they should make it readable like this piece of gem.
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this more of a slice of life danmachi fic. it has adventure tag but the Mc is barley in the labyrinth, barley any fighting scenes. got to chapter 30 I believe when he caught the jack bird.i know it dosent have an action tag but like I said it's more slice of life with very very slow world building. the first couple of chapters were fine. I thought the guy would go into the labyrinth more but i was wrong. so I got to go. good luck
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Gotta drop a 5 star for no Freya in harem, its too rare in Danmachi fics these days.
Writing Quality: 2The grammar isn't bad due to the AI fixing some stuff. But the repetition and diction are just painful at times. Descriptions of Muichiro's actions are repeated over and over, some scenes are overly detailed, and just a waste of word count frankly.Story Dev: 5If there is one redeeming quality so far, it would be the story development. The author chose the Demeter Familia, which isn't common, introduces new characters to build on top of the canon world, and is decent at showing Muichiro's growth. Again, the repetition of Muichiro's description makes it harder to tell if he is changing, staying the same, or both, but hopefully, that gets resolved. I am missing some context, so my evaluation may be a bit harsh, we'll see tho.Character Design: 4Again, the main reason I gave this a 4 is the sheer repetition of some descriptions. The author is doing a pretty good job in terms of interactions, but there is no need to say the same thing so much. And at least the author is pretty good at describing how the characters kind of look like, and the pictures help too. Updating Stability: 5Seems pretty consistent at 1 or more per day. So ya not much to say.World Background: 5Currently just the dan machi world. The author did say he wanted to expand beyond the scope of just orario and explore and introduce eastern areas, akin to Japan, more. Overall: 4.2The writing makes it painful to read, but I think this is a pretty worthwhile read. The story progression seems good, the author has some good ideas, and the later chaps are somewhat easier on the eyes/brain. There are still grammatical mistakes, mind you, but it is what it is. It's an above average FF on WN. Keep up the good work, author-kun.
The writing does not grasp my attention at all. There aren't too noticeable grammar mistakes, considering it is written by A.I. I don't mind the MC too much but the story development is a little too slow for my liking. All in all the story feels bland but it is held up by the promise of a good premise. Good luck moving forward. 👍
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The story is good but still has its share of flaws. First in my opinion I felt that the protagonist is too gary stu, Second all the chapters always ends in a poetic manner. Its fine for one or two chapters but every chapter ends in the artistic manner which renders the charm of these types of endings ineffective.
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Just finished reading chapter 2 and I couldn't wait any longer. THIS IS A MASTERPIECE. the Grammar, the storytelling, it's just... muah. If you're reading this and still not sure if you should read this... then just try reading chapter 1.
The author probably got help from chatgpt to make this but he definitly did a good job of making it readable. Even though technically chatgpt stories are “readable” it’s just too awkward and unrealistic stuff and also the unnecessary descriptions too. But the author actually seemed to do some revisions then just straight copy and paste from gpt so that got in my good books indeed.
Realmente me ah gustado la progresión de los capitulos, comencé con dudas pero realmente superó mis expectativas, sigue con el buen trabajo y no dejes caer está historia, estaré apoyando en futuros capitulos
Great story so far, I can't wait to read more.........................................................................................................
He was supposed to be emotionless but ar every chatear he displays 1 emotion at every paragraph
I really liked a very well done story that involves the bed in it in an extended way I hope it continues with the good chapter ...... .................
a good wholesome story with subtle but noticeable character progression.
What was written in 76 chapters I could write in 3. The amount of water (or useless text) in this story is about the same as the Earth, actually probably more since earth is only 71% water and this feels like 95% filler. If you think naruto was bad, then boy are you in for a treat. Its SUPER slice of life, MC is still level 1 @ch76, barely dungeon dives. Only decent thing about it is grammar tbh. Below average tbh.
It's a great story. The character is not obnoxious in spite of lacking feelings. My only problem is that it's extremely grandiloquent at time
I really enjoyed the story, it may have a few flaws but its still good, the character development is good too -sorry, my english is my third language
I love it for its writing style cuz most FANFICS out there is unreadable. I'm not one to judge grammar cuz mine also sucks, but at least if they want people to enjoy their works, they should make it readable like this piece of gem.
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this more of a slice of life danmachi fic. it has adventure tag but the Mc is barley in the labyrinth, barley any fighting scenes. got to chapter 30 I believe when he caught the jack bird.i know it dosent have an action tag but like I said it's more slice of life with very very slow world building. the first couple of chapters were fine. I thought the guy would go into the labyrinth more but i was wrong. so I got to go. good luck
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Gotta drop a 5 star for no Freya in harem, its too rare in Danmachi fics these days.
Writing Quality: 2The grammar isn't bad due to the AI fixing some stuff. But the repetition and diction are just painful at times. Descriptions of Muichiro's actions are repeated over and over, some scenes are overly detailed, and just a waste of word count frankly.Story Dev: 5If there is one redeeming quality so far, it would be the story development. The author chose the Demeter Familia, which isn't common, introduces new characters to build on top of the canon world, and is decent at showing Muichiro's growth. Again, the repetition of Muichiro's description makes it harder to tell if he is changing, staying the same, or both, but hopefully, that gets resolved. I am missing some context, so my evaluation may be a bit harsh, we'll see tho.Character Design: 4Again, the main reason I gave this a 4 is the sheer repetition of some descriptions. The author is doing a pretty good job in terms of interactions, but there is no need to say the same thing so much. And at least the author is pretty good at describing how the characters kind of look like, and the pictures help too. Updating Stability: 5Seems pretty consistent at 1 or more per day. So ya not much to say.World Background: 5Currently just the dan machi world. The author did say he wanted to expand beyond the scope of just orario and explore and introduce eastern areas, akin to Japan, more. Overall: 4.2The writing makes it painful to read, but I think this is a pretty worthwhile read. The story progression seems good, the author has some good ideas, and the later chaps are somewhat easier on the eyes/brain. There are still grammatical mistakes, mind you, but it is what it is. It's an above average FF on WN. Keep up the good work, author-kun.
The writing does not grasp my attention at all. There aren't too noticeable grammar mistakes, considering it is written by A.I. I don't mind the MC too much but the story development is a little too slow for my liking. All in all the story feels bland but it is held up by the promise of a good premise. Good luck moving forward. 👍
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The story is good but still has its share of flaws. First in my opinion I felt that the protagonist is too gary stu, Second all the chapters always ends in a poetic manner. Its fine for one or two chapters but every chapter ends in the artistic manner which renders the charm of these types of endings ineffective.
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Just finished reading chapter 2 and I couldn't wait any longer. THIS IS A MASTERPIECE. the Grammar, the storytelling, it's just... muah. If you're reading this and still not sure if you should read this... then just try reading chapter 1.
The author probably got help from chatgpt to make this but he definitly did a good job of making it readable. Even though technically chatgpt stories are “readable” it’s just too awkward and unrealistic stuff and also the unnecessary descriptions too. But the author actually seemed to do some revisions then just straight copy and paste from gpt so that got in my good books indeed.
Realmente me ah gustado la progresión de los capitulos, comencé con dudas pero realmente superó mis expectativas, sigue con el buen trabajo y no dejes caer está historia, estaré apoyando en futuros capitulos
Great story so far, I can't wait to read more.........................................................................................................
He was supposed to be emotionless but ar every chatear he displays 1 emotion at every paragraph
I really liked a very well done story that involves the bed in it in an extended way I hope it continues with the good chapter ...... .................
a good wholesome story with subtle but noticeable character progression.