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Good grammar, good character development, and a story that little by little flows, perhaps I would need a more innovative hook in the first chapters, but as I read I hope the author surprises me
the MC is not unique, he has a character of a random passerby, the plot is bad, it is not engaging, you cannot feel or understand what a character is feeling at the moment.
even though it is ur first work this novel is quite good. keep up the work. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
As an RPG enthusiast, I always love novels with concept revolving around this theme. The story's premise was a bit unique, refreshing. I would like to recommend this story to anyone. Hope you continue writing. [img=update][img=update]
..................................................... This is interesting ....................................................................
Why five stars? Give it a try and agree with me, the unique plot development, character depiction, welcoming synopsis and good grammar. Everything about this novel is worth some gifts stones and collections keep it up author, am eager to find out how the story unfolds and why you assured us that the mc is not gay[img=recommend][img=update][img=coins]
This novel is a great gem that obliged me to give a review thanks to how amazing it was. First of the MC his development is great and all the suffering he suffered and persevered through would put any MC to shame i won’t go into details as it would spoil the novel. If in was there instead of him i would have long given up. There aren’t many grammar mistakes but maybe i didn’t notice them as i have grown accustomed to MTL novels.
great.. keep writing..obviously there are some things here and there but overall it's great for a first novel. Mine sucked pretty hard lol
the the story mainly focuses on the main character but it does not focus on the other characters so therefore this story only revolves around the main character it shows a lack of character development in poor writing quality and story development therefore it has a chance to improve if it has a certain goal because the main character has no goal
I'm going to add it on my library for reference on my novel. I love the concept and ideas in it because I'm fond of RPG-themed stories. The author just needs proofreading.
The idea of harnessing a powerful system to overcome challenges and transform oneself is a captivating premise. The narrative's focus on the system's potential to turn ordinary individuals into formidable beings adds depth to the storyline.Overall, this story promises an exciting journey of discovery and empowerment for the protagonist, and I look forward to reading more to see how Aster's adventure unfolds.
It's an interesting novel and the concept is also nice. Author has been regular, which makes it a good read. Overall, I would like everyone to give it a try. This Book has potential.
the pacing is consistent, and i like the way the system is used in this novel. also aster is an enjoyable mc, so that's a plus. keep up the good work, and i recommend it to anyone.
Man, no words. I'm a sucker for stories like this. No complaints whatsoever. Loved the story and I hope you don't stop updating![img=update]
Excellent work. I like the writing style, the story, and how it starts and ends. Easy to read and easy on the eyes, so it's a nice experience for the reader. Like the main character's power or skill, this book has a lot of promise.
A system that can make an average weeb a world conqueror?! I love reading system stories. and this one is really interesting. The writing style is good and I really enjoyed reading it. I am not much into action stories but this one is really enjoyable.
Very interesting story with an engaging plot. The character development is also well paced and the flow of the overall storyline is good.
A very good work. I love the writing, the plot and the pace in which the story has begun and is being continued. But If I had to give some criticism, then that would be to shorten your paragraphs. Not to reduce the total number of words in a chapter, but to decrease the amount of words a para contains. Leave constant gaps between two to three sentences, this makes it very easy for the reader to read and will be lighter for their eyes, giving them a smooth reading experience. That would be it. Rest is amazing!
Just like the MC's power/ability this book has endless potential. It follows the system trope which is very popular at Webnovel but the system that was used in this book is very interesting along with its plotline presented in the few chapters that I read so far. Aside from the prologue, the content of every chapter is quite short but it makes it easier to read for a newbie reader like me. Overall this is a great book..
This is seriously underrated! The characters and the story both develop beautifully. Is this your debut novel? I strongly suggest you maintain this level of consistency. [img=recommend]
Now this is underrated. Both the characters and the story develops nicely. Your first novel, right? I recommend you stay consistent like you have been. Only thing I can say now is that Aster's one heck of a bad bomb! Haha.
The way the book develops is quite interesting to start with, and I can commend the updates which are quite stable.
Honest review from the author ---- This is my first work and there are certainly flaws, especially in the beginning so I would appreciate it if you could overlook those for a bit if you plan to read this. I am working hard to improve and I know I am improving gradually so the novel hopefully becomes more readable as chapters go on. I have tried to avoid common tropes and cliches as much as possible although one or two were needed to make the story happen. ---System--- The system in this novel is a bit different than the classic systems. First of all, if you have read the synopsis then you would know that the system was created by the mc, albeit unintentionally, so there is no cheat system popping out of thin air. At least you would know how the system came to be. ---Useless System?--- The system would be a bit, uhh stupid in the beginning so it won't be a complete cheat yet. The system would grow alongside the mc as the story progresses. There is also this mystery of how the system became like that but that is for the future. ---Update consistency and chapter length--- I update at least once a day. The word count per chapter is a bit inconsistent as it ranges between 1k to 1.6k. A few chapters might have about 2k words but those are few and around the first 30 to 40 chaps. ---Confusing power system--- This does not mean this novel features a complex power system. The power system consists of cultivation, magic, and a universal system that everyone possesses that is referred to as the soulguide. The confusion is attributed to my poor planning as a beginner author so I will release info chapters in the auxiliary volume to help things a bit. If this may prove inconvenient to you, the reader, then I apologize. As a note, English is not my first language so yeah. I would greatly appreciate it if you give feedback. This would help me improve, and make the story more enjoyable to read and worth your time. If you have any questions about the story then ask them here. I will reply as soon as I can. 5 stars because this review was posted during a special occasion for this novel and not because I am shameless.
Good grammar, good character development, and a story that little by little flows, perhaps I would need a more innovative hook in the first chapters, but as I read I hope the author surprises me
the MC is not unique, he has a character of a random passerby, the plot is bad, it is not engaging, you cannot feel or understand what a character is feeling at the moment.
even though it is ur first work this novel is quite good. keep up the work. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
As an RPG enthusiast, I always love novels with concept revolving around this theme. The story's premise was a bit unique, refreshing. I would like to recommend this story to anyone. Hope you continue writing. [img=update][img=update]
..................................................... This is interesting ....................................................................
Why five stars? Give it a try and agree with me, the unique plot development, character depiction, welcoming synopsis and good grammar. Everything about this novel is worth some gifts stones and collections keep it up author, am eager to find out how the story unfolds and why you assured us that the mc is not gay[img=recommend][img=update][img=coins]
This novel is a great gem that obliged me to give a review thanks to how amazing it was. First of the MC his development is great and all the suffering he suffered and persevered through would put any MC to shame i won’t go into details as it would spoil the novel. If in was there instead of him i would have long given up. There aren’t many grammar mistakes but maybe i didn’t notice them as i have grown accustomed to MTL novels.
great.. keep writing..obviously there are some things here and there but overall it's great for a first novel. Mine sucked pretty hard lol
the the story mainly focuses on the main character but it does not focus on the other characters so therefore this story only revolves around the main character it shows a lack of character development in poor writing quality and story development therefore it has a chance to improve if it has a certain goal because the main character has no goal
I'm going to add it on my library for reference on my novel. I love the concept and ideas in it because I'm fond of RPG-themed stories. The author just needs proofreading.
The idea of harnessing a powerful system to overcome challenges and transform oneself is a captivating premise. The narrative's focus on the system's potential to turn ordinary individuals into formidable beings adds depth to the storyline.Overall, this story promises an exciting journey of discovery and empowerment for the protagonist, and I look forward to reading more to see how Aster's adventure unfolds.
It's an interesting novel and the concept is also nice. Author has been regular, which makes it a good read. Overall, I would like everyone to give it a try. This Book has potential.
the pacing is consistent, and i like the way the system is used in this novel. also aster is an enjoyable mc, so that's a plus. keep up the good work, and i recommend it to anyone.
Man, no words. I'm a sucker for stories like this. No complaints whatsoever. Loved the story and I hope you don't stop updating![img=update]
Excellent work. I like the writing style, the story, and how it starts and ends. Easy to read and easy on the eyes, so it's a nice experience for the reader. Like the main character's power or skill, this book has a lot of promise.
A system that can make an average weeb a world conqueror?! I love reading system stories. and this one is really interesting. The writing style is good and I really enjoyed reading it. I am not much into action stories but this one is really enjoyable.
Very interesting story with an engaging plot. The character development is also well paced and the flow of the overall storyline is good.
A very good work. I love the writing, the plot and the pace in which the story has begun and is being continued. But If I had to give some criticism, then that would be to shorten your paragraphs. Not to reduce the total number of words in a chapter, but to decrease the amount of words a para contains. Leave constant gaps between two to three sentences, this makes it very easy for the reader to read and will be lighter for their eyes, giving them a smooth reading experience. That would be it. Rest is amazing!
Just like the MC's power/ability this book has endless potential. It follows the system trope which is very popular at Webnovel but the system that was used in this book is very interesting along with its plotline presented in the few chapters that I read so far. Aside from the prologue, the content of every chapter is quite short but it makes it easier to read for a newbie reader like me. Overall this is a great book..
This is seriously underrated! The characters and the story both develop beautifully. Is this your debut novel? I strongly suggest you maintain this level of consistency. [img=recommend]
Now this is underrated. Both the characters and the story develops nicely. Your first novel, right? I recommend you stay consistent like you have been. Only thing I can say now is that Aster's one heck of a bad bomb! Haha.
The way the book develops is quite interesting to start with, and I can commend the updates which are quite stable.
Honest review from the author ---- This is my first work and there are certainly flaws, especially in the beginning so I would appreciate it if you could overlook those for a bit if you plan to read this. I am working hard to improve and I know I am improving gradually so the novel hopefully becomes more readable as chapters go on. I have tried to avoid common tropes and cliches as much as possible although one or two were needed to make the story happen. ---System--- The system in this novel is a bit different than the classic systems. First of all, if you have read the synopsis then you would know that the system was created by the mc, albeit unintentionally, so there is no cheat system popping out of thin air. At least you would know how the system came to be. ---Useless System?--- The system would be a bit, uhh stupid in the beginning so it won't be a complete cheat yet. The system would grow alongside the mc as the story progresses. There is also this mystery of how the system became like that but that is for the future. ---Update consistency and chapter length--- I update at least once a day. The word count per chapter is a bit inconsistent as it ranges between 1k to 1.6k. A few chapters might have about 2k words but those are few and around the first 30 to 40 chaps. ---Confusing power system--- This does not mean this novel features a complex power system. The power system consists of cultivation, magic, and a universal system that everyone possesses that is referred to as the soulguide. The confusion is attributed to my poor planning as a beginner author so I will release info chapters in the auxiliary volume to help things a bit. If this may prove inconvenient to you, the reader, then I apologize. As a note, English is not my first language so yeah. I would greatly appreciate it if you give feedback. This would help me improve, and make the story more enjoyable to read and worth your time. If you have any questions about the story then ask them here. I will reply as soon as I can. 5 stars because this review was posted during a special occasion for this novel and not because I am shameless.