Oshi No Ko: The Millionaire Boxer

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- Your choice of characters is interesting, and as a consequence you have created a unique blend of elements of the boxing world and Japanese culture. However, you should pay extra attention to the description of the fight scenes so that readers can get a more detailed image of the imagined events and a visual image of what is going on. - Your file is filled with interesting ideas, but you should develop the characters of your fictional characters more vividly and clearly. Readers often empathize with the characters, so adding more detail in describing the characters' thoughts and emotions can enhance the reader's communication with the characters and get them interested in the events of the piece. - We recommend paying attention to grammar, punctuation, and technical errors. These errors can hinder viewers from reading the text and make it difficult for them to understand. - It is also recommended to pay attention to formatting. Most readers today read on mobile devices, and texts without easy formatting can make it difficult to read. - Of course, continuous updating of the work is also important. It is advisable to notify your readers of new chapters or updates to keep them interested in paying attention to your fanfic. Overall, your fanfic is full of interesting ideas that have the potential to be popular. To improve the work, you should pay attention to such things as the description of combat scenes and character development, as well as updates, formatting, and grammatical and stylistic errors.I wish you the best of luck with your story!

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ArdaPendragon

There's nothing romantic between him and Ai yet and Ai was ra*ed so it's a terrible story[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Golden_Dragoon

its on chapter 4. thought mc will face slap the mafia like some Chiness mc. but he didn't. quite disappointed about it. hope author post more chapter.

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Tobi_ntr_king

ai was r@ped even tho mc met her at 13 .

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Teraten

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Kratos9211

Keep up the good work.Added it in my library

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Chintu_Mane

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Chintu_Mane

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Cedri

ganbare!! [img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong]