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IS good but needs more polishing to make the words flow better however as i looked in the reviews i noticed 2 of them being bots because they copy-pasted their review from somewhere else these 2 reviews being from: "Young_Elite" and "Nazar_satybaldyev" who might be an alt account from the first guy. So author should probably delete one
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Overall, not that bad. Definitely needs a rewrite in my opinion but otherwise is fine if a tab bit confusing at times. I love the idea of the story TBH, and am looking forward to have more of it.
If you want to read a good dc fanfic with good quality writing and great story telling skills then you are in the wrong place. The spelling and grammar are okay but the author just doesn’t know how to write a story. Instead he just throws whatever his thoughts are into the story with no narration, or any kind of actual structure. He just seems to think that just saying what he wants to happen exactly as it happens in his mind somehow makes this make sense. I’ve lost multiple brain cells while reading this. Even if for some magical reason the author did suddenly gain the ability to use actually decent structuring it would still be a basic wish fulfillment story with no reasoning and no explanations. Sorry for the long review. Just felt like making this because I wanted to rant. Thank you for obliging me.
I really enjoyed reading the story so far. The only problem I have is that sometimes the grammar/paragraph is weird? IDK but so far it is good
Written pretty horribly, but there are no other R6 fanfics out there so this is good enough by default.
⭐️⭐️⭐️ Grammar Mistakes(Use either Grammarly(or another editing software) or get an editor) Characters could use some work(need more proper conversations, try not to use shorten words unless the characters uses them) needs spacing between paragraphs ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ 🤷 not bad, better than most so far ⭐️⭐️⭐️ story idea is pretty good. Execution so far is alright. Though, your MC might want to have a definite goal, one that we can see happening with his limited powers. For example, don’t have him decide to kill every hero. As someone who used to live in our world(should be aware of the dangers of doing so) and has 65 people (soldiers who fought for peace) experiences, he shouldn’t have any real reason to do that unless it’s for corruption or revenge and I don’t think his bullets are hitting flash or Superman unless he pulls some sort of trickery. ⭐️⭐️⭐️ Characters feel bland, it’s hard to picture what’s happening and the expression or tone of the characters when they have conversations or do something ⭐️⭐️⭐️ Mostly has been in a city and only has just moved out of the city. Doesn’t really talk much about what’s happening in the world. Hope this helps you improve. Good luck 👍
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only has 20 chapters so I am going with this it has a lot of potential and i like it i just think you need more details and the pacing is kinda fast personally I would love a slower plot but keep up the good work
Main character is boring, childish, edgy the story is not good because the does things for no reason and that ruins the story for me.
If you are looking for a story with well written characters, interesting powers and abilities or good story telling this story is not for you. Author doesn't seem to know how to write a story and just word vomits what they want to happen. The grammer is alright and the story is not very engaging nor descriptive. If you want a very generic and basic wish fulfillment story this story is for you.
yea this fic is pretty bad ngl the Mc in the first few chapters kills a whole wearhouse full of people for a phone instead of waiting for them to sell it but then later on he acts stupid in front of the bat family and starts telling the Jojo story all in all this story feels like a fanfic whith close to zero potential.
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If you want to read a good dc fanfic with good quality writing and great story telling skills then you are in the wrong place. The spelling and grammar are okay but the author just doesn’t know how to write a story. Instead he just throws whatever his thoughts are into the story with no narration, or any kind of actual structure. He just seems to think that just saying what he wants to happen exactly as it happens in his mind somehow makes this make sense. I’ve lost multiple brain cells while reading this. Even if for some magical reason the author did suddenly gain the ability to use actually decent structuring it would still be a basic wish fulfillment story with no reasoning and no explanations. Sorry for the long review. Just felt like making this because I wanted to rant. Thank you for obliging me.
Im surprised why he even asked for such weak wishes when he's going to dc and even with all the tech he has he still ends up getting caught like an idiot multiple times, no not like an idiot he's definitely one of the dumbest mc I've seen.
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To be honest I was somewhat sceptical about this fic but so far it's good. Keep up the good work.
I really enjoy the book so far. please continue to write. I was reading it while I got toe surgery.
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I know your pain my grandpa just died too 3 days after my B Day and when i was informed i was devastated so i send my regards to you i just hope you can get over the despair you must be in by the news.
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IS good but needs more polishing to make the words flow better however as i looked in the reviews i noticed 2 of them being bots because they copy-pasted their review from somewhere else these 2 reviews being from: "Young_Elite" and "Nazar_satybaldyev" who might be an alt account from the first guy. So author should probably delete one
late but appreciated, don't leave it too long. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=fp][img=fp][img=recommend][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=recommend][img=faceslap][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]
Overall, not that bad. Definitely needs a rewrite in my opinion but otherwise is fine if a tab bit confusing at times. I love the idea of the story TBH, and am looking forward to have more of it.
If you want to read a good dc fanfic with good quality writing and great story telling skills then you are in the wrong place. The spelling and grammar are okay but the author just doesn’t know how to write a story. Instead he just throws whatever his thoughts are into the story with no narration, or any kind of actual structure. He just seems to think that just saying what he wants to happen exactly as it happens in his mind somehow makes this make sense. I’ve lost multiple brain cells while reading this. Even if for some magical reason the author did suddenly gain the ability to use actually decent structuring it would still be a basic wish fulfillment story with no reasoning and no explanations. Sorry for the long review. Just felt like making this because I wanted to rant. Thank you for obliging me.
I really enjoyed reading the story so far. The only problem I have is that sometimes the grammar/paragraph is weird? IDK but so far it is good
Written pretty horribly, but there are no other R6 fanfics out there so this is good enough by default.
⭐️⭐️⭐️ Grammar Mistakes(Use either Grammarly(or another editing software) or get an editor) Characters could use some work(need more proper conversations, try not to use shorten words unless the characters uses them) needs spacing between paragraphs ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ 🤷 not bad, better than most so far ⭐️⭐️⭐️ story idea is pretty good. Execution so far is alright. Though, your MC might want to have a definite goal, one that we can see happening with his limited powers. For example, don’t have him decide to kill every hero. As someone who used to live in our world(should be aware of the dangers of doing so) and has 65 people (soldiers who fought for peace) experiences, he shouldn’t have any real reason to do that unless it’s for corruption or revenge and I don’t think his bullets are hitting flash or Superman unless he pulls some sort of trickery. ⭐️⭐️⭐️ Characters feel bland, it’s hard to picture what’s happening and the expression or tone of the characters when they have conversations or do something ⭐️⭐️⭐️ Mostly has been in a city and only has just moved out of the city. Doesn’t really talk much about what’s happening in the world. Hope this helps you improve. Good luck 👍
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only has 20 chapters so I am going with this it has a lot of potential and i like it i just think you need more details and the pacing is kinda fast personally I would love a slower plot but keep up the good work
Main character is boring, childish, edgy the story is not good because the does things for no reason and that ruins the story for me.
If you are looking for a story with well written characters, interesting powers and abilities or good story telling this story is not for you. Author doesn't seem to know how to write a story and just word vomits what they want to happen. The grammer is alright and the story is not very engaging nor descriptive. If you want a very generic and basic wish fulfillment story this story is for you.
yea this fic is pretty bad ngl the Mc in the first few chapters kills a whole wearhouse full of people for a phone instead of waiting for them to sell it but then later on he acts stupid in front of the bat family and starts telling the Jojo story all in all this story feels like a fanfic whith close to zero potential.
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If you want to read a good dc fanfic with good quality writing and great story telling skills then you are in the wrong place. The spelling and grammar are okay but the author just doesn’t know how to write a story. Instead he just throws whatever his thoughts are into the story with no narration, or any kind of actual structure. He just seems to think that just saying what he wants to happen exactly as it happens in his mind somehow makes this make sense. I’ve lost multiple brain cells while reading this. Even if for some magical reason the author did suddenly gain the ability to use actually decent structuring it would still be a basic wish fulfillment story with no reasoning and no explanations. Sorry for the long review. Just felt like making this because I wanted to rant. Thank you for obliging me.
Im surprised why he even asked for such weak wishes when he's going to dc and even with all the tech he has he still ends up getting caught like an idiot multiple times, no not like an idiot he's definitely one of the dumbest mc I've seen.
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To be honest I was somewhat sceptical about this fic but so far it's good. Keep up the good work.
I really enjoy the book so far. please continue to write. I was reading it while I got toe surgery.
Worth the read,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
I know your pain my grandpa just died too 3 days after my B Day and when i was informed i was devastated so i send my regards to you i just hope you can get over the despair you must be in by the news.
Hello there …………………………………………………… there …………………………………………………… there …………………………………………………… there …………………………………………………… there ……………………………………………………