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Tengo una pregunta a isse lo vas dejar con una mujer para que saji se quede con el resto por ejemplo con akeno o koneko y kuroka y asia xenovia??????????????????????
This was absolutely fantastic The world background is built greatly and The overall background of the characters written very well It goes in depth about his past and where he wants to go with his future and I do love how he and his sisters get along real well and they both have mutual love And I also do appreciate the interactions between sooner and himself and the rest of the peerage I do wish that there would be more chapters because we just need more chapters it's so good that we need more chapters so please update and give us some more chapters Thank you very much for your time.
update more please, it's really good, and we have an mc with a reason and a good background info on how and why he Acts, so please more
This fanfic is very good and brings you a lot of different flavor at this point the story is still in it's development phase so the potential to become great is there and the author is doing a good job a better job than most dxd fanfics, just good luck bro writing can be a very fulfilling and stressful work so take it easy👍🏽
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Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad. Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad.Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad.Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad.
¿Tengo una pregunta va estar también koneko ,kuroka , akeno en el harem de Sanji y me opinión deberías dejar isse con solo dos chicas del harem y el resto para Sanji ?????????????????????????????????????????🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
I gotta say this story is looking promising. I really like the foundation of the story and its character design/characteristics which are really good. Also, the way you write things make it easy to understand and follow which is refreshing to see such a story development. In short, I love it and I can just hope the author doesn’t drop such a story.
So far so good. Author can give Vitra's soul fragment the ability of shadow monarch. It's for his little sisters protection (shadow guard) and convinient (shadow teleport). Saji also can become dragon rider by awaken dragon corpse (scattered soul). It's just my suggestion, author. You can write what you want.
looks promising, not a lot of dxd fanfics focus on Sona in particular, so plus in that regard.
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bro every time i finally found a good fanfic it always has a few chapters😑 and some of then even get dropped . Please don't dropped this (sorry for my grammar)
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don't let the 3.6 rating fool you. As of now, this ff has 1 chapter, and I absolutely love it. I will put this baby into the library and wait for more chapters.
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Gran comienzo! Realmente me gustan tus trabajos, espero sigas así... Aunque soy más del lado de dxd que de danmachi eso no quita que disfruto mucho ambas. Sigue con tu buen trabajo 👌👌👌👌👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Ahhh, what to say, what to say? I love it! Author-sama you really are a fantastic writer. I was excited to read this novel. I honestly love how hardworking the MC is, how he can honestly respect people and not treat them as a fictional character. Honestly, I’m only a little disappointed on how much you skipped, in order to get to the main story. Imagine the hardship the MC had to live through growing up and taking care of his little sisters. I want to see that, I want to read about it, no! I have to read about it! Author-sama please write about the MC past, make it a chapter or two. Imagine how much stress the MC had to go through in order to have good grade and amazing sport and combat abilities. Imagine how little sleep the MC had, imagine the responsibility of being an other brother, no their guardian. How he idk only has like 4 hrs of sleep, how he force himself not to cry after loosing his grandfather in front of his little sisters. How he had to wake up early in order to dress them for school and make breakfast, lunch, and dinner. How he might have struggle for money in order to keep her sisters smile. How he tried tutoring them and etc. While reading this chapter, I realized that the MC possesses amazing abilities, but please don’t down play his achievements, sure you can say he’s amazing at mix martial arts but imagine how hard he worked for it. I’m sure our MC walked home one day seriously bruised and injured from training. Maybe he still need to finish his hw that day, maybe he wanted to hide his injuries from his family. Perhaps his sisters already knew his struggle. You should really develop the MC’s relationship with his sisters more, you make it sound like background character. You know I wouldn’t mind if you revised the first chapter to include this. Either way, I love your write.
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Tengo una pregunta a isse lo vas dejar con una mujer para que saji se quede con el resto por ejemplo con akeno o koneko y kuroka y asia xenovia??????????????????????
This was absolutely fantastic The world background is built greatly and The overall background of the characters written very well It goes in depth about his past and where he wants to go with his future and I do love how he and his sisters get along real well and they both have mutual love And I also do appreciate the interactions between sooner and himself and the rest of the peerage I do wish that there would be more chapters because we just need more chapters it's so good that we need more chapters so please update and give us some more chapters Thank you very much for your time.
update more please, it's really good, and we have an mc with a reason and a good background info on how and why he Acts, so please more
This fanfic is very good and brings you a lot of different flavor at this point the story is still in it's development phase so the potential to become great is there and the author is doing a good job a better job than most dxd fanfics, just good luck bro writing can be a very fulfilling and stressful work so take it easy👍🏽
Magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico magnífico ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Membuka SPOILER Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad. Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad.Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad.Demasiado god, tan pocos capítulos pero tanta calidad.
¿Tengo una pregunta va estar también koneko ,kuroka , akeno en el harem de Sanji y me opinión deberías dejar isse con solo dos chicas del harem y el resto para Sanji ?????????????????????????????????????????🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
I gotta say this story is looking promising. I really like the foundation of the story and its character design/characteristics which are really good. Also, the way you write things make it easy to understand and follow which is refreshing to see such a story development. In short, I love it and I can just hope the author doesn’t drop such a story.
So far so good. Author can give Vitra's soul fragment the ability of shadow monarch. It's for his little sisters protection (shadow guard) and convinient (shadow teleport). Saji also can become dragon rider by awaken dragon corpse (scattered soul). It's just my suggestion, author. You can write what you want.
looks promising, not a lot of dxd fanfics focus on Sona in particular, so plus in that regard.
Great story ❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍
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bro every time i finally found a good fanfic it always has a few chapters😑 and some of then even get dropped . Please don't dropped this (sorry for my grammar)
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don't let the 3.6 rating fool you. As of now, this ff has 1 chapter, and I absolutely love it. I will put this baby into the library and wait for more chapters.
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Gran comienzo! Realmente me gustan tus trabajos, espero sigas así... Aunque soy más del lado de dxd que de danmachi eso no quita que disfruto mucho ambas. Sigue con tu buen trabajo 👌👌👌👌👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Ahhh, what to say, what to say? I love it! Author-sama you really are a fantastic writer. I was excited to read this novel. I honestly love how hardworking the MC is, how he can honestly respect people and not treat them as a fictional character. Honestly, I’m only a little disappointed on how much you skipped, in order to get to the main story. Imagine the hardship the MC had to live through growing up and taking care of his little sisters. I want to see that, I want to read about it, no! I have to read about it! Author-sama please write about the MC past, make it a chapter or two. Imagine how much stress the MC had to go through in order to have good grade and amazing sport and combat abilities. Imagine how little sleep the MC had, imagine the responsibility of being an other brother, no their guardian. How he idk only has like 4 hrs of sleep, how he force himself not to cry after loosing his grandfather in front of his little sisters. How he had to wake up early in order to dress them for school and make breakfast, lunch, and dinner. How he might have struggle for money in order to keep her sisters smile. How he tried tutoring them and etc. While reading this chapter, I realized that the MC possesses amazing abilities, but please don’t down play his achievements, sure you can say he’s amazing at mix martial arts but imagine how hard he worked for it. I’m sure our MC walked home one day seriously bruised and injured from training. Maybe he still need to finish his hw that day, maybe he wanted to hide his injuries from his family. Perhaps his sisters already knew his struggle. You should really develop the MC’s relationship with his sisters more, you make it sound like background character. You know I wouldn’t mind if you revised the first chapter to include this. Either way, I love your write.
I love your work can I ask if you have any intention on resuming this story